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The House Call


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  6 total reviews 
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Iza Deleanu
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Quite an unexpected tourney for your written so well poem - know it sounds crazy, I thought him just lazy.
It's not the first time he's lied still for days, gee,
And now you inform me he's pushing up daisies?
He's toast, like that ghost from the movie with Swayze-
You just killed the entire household and grant the last wish. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
    Thanks Iza. I had some free time on my hands and was just having fun packing in as many rhymes as I could.
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visionary1234
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Oh this one made me laugh soooo hard! It reads like a Gilbert & Sullivan patter song! LOVE IT!!! It would make a GREAT stage performance piece and I would LOVE to be the one to perform it!!! :):):)
:)Sharyn


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
    Thanks so much - sometimes it's nice just to play with sound and to pack in as may rhymes as you can.
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LOL!! Oh, someone put these 'down times' to great use here -- thank you so much for that awesome smile and contest offering for the day!! ;) :) Best of luck at the polls! ;)


 Comment Written 03-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 04-Apr-2020
    Thanks - yeah, being quarantined does provide a little extra time to think of rhymes.
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Alcreator Litt Dear
 
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This speaks an anomalous story about a house having patients who appear scared and callous about their diseases as the doctor was put in a dilemma to diagnose the patients, now the matter turns serious; well said.


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
    Thanks much for the review.
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Jeffrey Ford
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I think that you wrote a great poem! The hook caught me when you mentioned Covid 19. I like how you made everything rhyme in your poem. I think that you made the rhymes in a very creative way. I'm very sorry to her about the dad passing. Very great and well written Poem!


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
    Thanks Jeffrey. I focused on the rhymes more than the content in this one - sometimes it's just nice to play with sound.
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I enjoyed reading your poem. One thing I liked is that you color coded everything. Another thing I liked is that it rhymed. Also, it's like a story in the format of a poem. Once again, I really liked your poem, and good luck in the contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2020
    Thanks much for the review. btw, cute dog in your photo!

reply by Tanvi Pauddar on 02-Apr-2020
    You're welcome. I like that dog pic so much, that it is my profile pic for everything. Good luck in the contest!
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