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Boys in the Night


a loop poem

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Y. M. Roger
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Yes!! Yes! Peyote would be one guess... there are others... but as long as you realize you have me laughing so hard I've got tears... Bill this is just a complete mess but it's a beautiful mess and I absolutely love it!! Gosh, I must be under too much stress with this teaching crap, but this has been a wonderful interlude... yeah, this gets a six just cuz I'm still laughing... Yvette


 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks, Yvette, for the super-nice mercy review for this loopy thing. Glad I could bring you a smile. Bill
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Boys in the Night
by Bill Schott

Hello, Bill,

Great entry for the loop poem contest. Peyote? LoL. I like your poem style. It flows well, almost like a song. Nice presentation too.


 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thank you, Gypsy, for the nice review. Bill.
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This is a Wonderful loop poem. I love your use of homonyms. You use a fast pace to tell your story and it works. Very good work. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thank you, Cindy.
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I like how you told this story using this difficult loop poem style. I especially like how most of the repeated words are homophones! However, I didn't see the required abcb rhyme scheme. Best wishes in the contest!


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    I didn?t see that requirement. Gee, just think, this marvelous creation will not even be considered because of that gaff. Tragic. Send in the clowns. There ought to be clowns. Thanks, lyenochka, for giving this a look.

reply by lyenochka on 05-Apr-2020
    I made the same error last year or was it the year before? After that, I threw in the towel regarding the loop poem. You have a week to edit!

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks again for the heads up.
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Dear Bill, natcherly it would take a man to think of a theme like like this one. But once you got going, there was no end to the list of things that can fly through your brain to creat a looppoem like this one. Thanks for the smiles.


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    Thanks, Suzanna. I was in a cactus button mood I guess. Not really.

reply by Suzanna Ray on 05-Apr-2020
    Now that?s a prickly description of a mood
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This is great and should do well in the loop poetry contest. Peyote inspired? Excellent connections with the words from one line to the next. Great alliteration in brain brass, bats. You add some rhyme as a plus with noise, joys, and boys. Very creative and rates a six for that. judi


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    Thank you very much, Judi.
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Your loop poetry is interesting and unusual, which should draw interest in the contest. It is full of boy things they would be interested in. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    Thanks, TT
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Whoa. It is becoming quite clear to me that you are on one. Tell me, have you adjusted your medication? Readingyou is like going on a magical adventure, one has no clue where he will end up. Along the way, he will encounter some surprising sights and sounds. One might even experience a bit of nausea, "choke it back son." At the end of the day, you will wiser and just maybe a little sad, but you will not soon forget it. From one who likes you and thinks pretty highly of you, I will say in a voice I usually reserve for my closest friends: "Man you are crazy as hell!" and I mean that in a nice way.


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    Thank you, nomi, for your great critique, candor, and good wishes. I like you too. These challenges that require LOOPING words are too gimmicky to be approached any other way than humorously. Happy day. Stay safe.

reply by nomi338 on 05-Apr-2020
    Roger that.
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This is a fun loop and amid the chaos I hardly noticed it was a loop as I was tied up in the mayhem! Flying baseball bats, the rats and the ducks! Ha ha ha, you made me smile and this is a fun write Bill, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    Thank you, Dolly
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I could see the chaotic version of events taking place that night. Especially the lines about "bats' and "ducks".

Enjoyed the read.

Best of luck in the "Loop Poetry" Contest.


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
    Thank you, R
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