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The Day we Celebrate


A 4th of July Parade?

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Stan,

Oh, yes. I LOVE this vision. And what I also love is that, for once, the simple people are being recognized for the job they do -- those on the front life of life - the first-responders, nurses, doctors, janitors, and similar workers who are seldom called 'heroes' in the way they should.

I can't wait for that parade - wish I could be there, but I imagine every city will have its own smaller form of celebration.

A small suggestion:
--> Heroes stood on floats, fire engines, and limousines.
--> Heroes (rode) on floats, fire engines, and limousines.
--> I can't really see them standing on limousines...?

Thanks!


 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    I prefer to be called a Sanitation Specialist! LOL

reply by robyn corum on 06-Apr-2020
    haha
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Nice job forecasting! I suspect we will have surpassed this crisis of sorts also by July 4. Or maybe people will set off fireworks a little earlier than that. Only wanted to point out: white robbed
I think you mean white-robed
New York seems to be getting a lot of news on this lately. Well-justified, though.


 Comment Written 06-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks Crystie for finding what was a huge mistake.

reply by CrystieCookie999 on 06-Apr-2020
    You are welcome.
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thaities, Rebecca V.
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Now that is a writing of hope and joy worthy of seven stars. I can only afford six. Ha ha. Wouldn't it be wonderful if your writing came true! Oh, for July 4 to arrive quickly.


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks again Rebecca. That golden plus never gets old.

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 06-Apr-2020
    ha ha
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I like the hope that you've conveyed in this. I know that their are many that feel like they are without hope. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work.!! Well done!


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks Jeff
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Oh, I think all your readers wish for a Fourth of July like this where we can all celebrate the end of the pandemic. Indeed the leaders or marshals of the parade would be those marvelous nurses and doctors. My only serious criticism of this story is your last sentence--a cliche.


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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks Rod There is no defense for Cliche' unless I guess it was my intention. Fair enough. I can use help with my edits, for sure.
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This is a fine suggestion, Stan. These people truly deserve to be feted
as the heroes they are. I don't that we'll be out of the hole by this Fourth of July, but maybe next year. Better still, the health care workers may deserve a holiday all their own.

Peace, Lee


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks Lee!
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I so look forward to that day when this horrid virus is over. All we can do now is stay home, pray that it will be over soon. Your story is well-written. Your great description paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Thank you for sharing this hopeful piece. It gives all of us something to look forward too in the near future. Stay safe dear friend.


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks Misty!
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I do so hope this story comes to pass on the fourth of July. They deserve a parade but I would love to know this will all be history by then and we can get back to the business of living. Nice story.
Beth


 Comment Written 05-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
    Thanks Beth!
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