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Battlefield of the mind


Don't let every thought walk in unchallenged

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This ten-word poem, Battlefield of the Mind, has the required word count and suggests we stand up the army and challenge the world's ways that they might be suitable for us and what we chose to believe.


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2020


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Excellent, yes the mind when used right can be the greatest weapon of all, you have said a great deal with a wonderful message in this short work, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you. I'm so glad that you approve. I appreciate you sharing your encouraging and insightful comments along with the excellent review. Bless you!
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Wonderful words! I like your alliteration of words and the strong metaphors used. Your poem reminded me of 2 Corinthians 10:5 "We destroy arguments and every lofty opinion raised against the knowledge of God, and take every thought captive to obey Christ."
Best wishes in the contest!


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    That's the scripture I was thinking about along with parts of Ephesians 6. I'm glad that you like it. Thanks for sharing your supportive and insightful comments along with the excellent review. Bless you!
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Even though it was only ten words, you really impacted the readers thought process whilst reading. The statement was profound and very interesting. Stay safe!


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    I'm glad that you approve and that it resonated with you. Your thoughtful and supportive comments along with the excellent review are greatly appreciated. Bless you!
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Sometimes getting wrapped up in our own mental battles can be more challenging than the outward ones. At least others can see what you're going through then. No one understands what we think or why we think it. I started therapy a couple months ago and it's crazy how she can pick apart my head like no one else. I guess that's why she gets paid the big bucks.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    The mind is the control center. It has to be renewed an weeded daily from negative, impure, and evil thoughts. I lean on the Lord and His word by His Spirit to help me. I didn't have the best childhood. I'll spare you most of the details because it would take to long and you may not want to hear it. To shorten it a bit, I thought that nobody loved me and that I was no good. I was tormented in my mind daily as a lad with negative thoughts. I would walk around with my head down not looking anyone in the face ever. I was that damaged. I went to church one day as a lad and heard about someone that loved me. I went to kneel at the alter to receive Him. I still walked around with my head down after receiving Him. It appeared like nothing happened until a few days later I heard His voice. It was clear as day. He said to me, son, from this day forward, don't you ever put your head down. Put your head up from now on, you are a child of the King. From that day forward, I didn't ever put my head down again. I was changed from that day forward. Forgive me for being so long winded. The story is so much longer than this. This is the short version. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!

reply by ExperiencingLiphe on 14-Apr-2020
    Yeah God and I have our ups and downs but that's okay. I know He's there, most of the time. lol. I'm glad you're in a better place. I'm in a much better place than I use to be in that's for sure :)
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Excellent double alliteration is this 10 word poem with "f" and "w". A timely piece with good word choice and picture choice as well.

Very nicely doneJeff.
Blessings for a Happy Easter and stay well.

Janet


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thanks Janet. I'm so glad that you like it. Your kind and uplifting comments along with the excellent review are greatly appreciated. Bless you!
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Hello Friend,
10 Word Poem - What a MARVELOUS piece of poetry this is!
Impressive and Meaningful phraseology.
Enchanting flow having nice alliteration, and depicting transparently the theme.
"...wielding wisdom's battle tested weapons."
Superb!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
[ 5 Stars + ...Here what is invisible is practically visible. I'm sure you can understand what I want to say.]


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    I understand. The mind's garden must be weeded on a daily basis. Thanks for sharing this insightful and encouraging comments along with the excellent review. Bless you!

reply by RPSaxena on 16-Apr-2020
    JLM, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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You have the required ten words for your poem.

The double alliteration was nicely done.

During this isolated time, I hope we are 'welding' our minds adn not just calcified couch potatoes.

I enjoyed your poem.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you. I appreciate you sharing your supportive and thoughtful comments along with the excellent review. Bless you!
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rama devi
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This is potent and well voiced with all the alliteration adding emphasis, further intensifying the tone. The consonance of S adds a fine musical counterpoint as well. The theme is timely and relevant, as courage is the best response to fear. Good flow. Just one suggestion (optional) to hyphenate battle-tested.

This is a strong contender for my vote. Good luck!

Warmly,
rd



 Comment Written 10-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you. I'm so glad that you approve and that it resonated with you. I appreciate you sharing your uplifting, insightful, and encouraging comments along with the excellent review. Bless you!

reply by rama devi on 13-Apr-2020
    Bless you too! :)
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thaities, Rebecca V.
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Our mind is a great part of our being, therefore it behooves us to fortify it with the best battle tested wisdom. To me this would come from the Bible, particularly from Proverbs. Well done!


 Comment Written 10-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thanks Rebecca. I'm so glad that you like it. Your insightful and supportive comments along with the excellent review is greatly appreciated. Bless you!

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 13-Apr-2020
    You're very welcome.
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