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Faith evolved for me - Grace saved me!

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ExperiencingLiphe
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We can't be pushed into faith. I always say if you want someone to believe you just have to believe. You don't have to preach. Just be their friend, be someone they can confide in, love them, be there for them. Show them the qualities that they would want to achieve. Great job with this and I'm so glad you found your faith :)


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
    Thank you, may this Easter bring you unlimited measured fo hope that these unsettled days will pass.
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I think it's a great personal testament to the journey of faith, from being born outside it, to discovering through the struggles of life, the grace of Our Lord and Savior, Jesus Christ. you have a very personal, honest language here, and that makes it approachable and relevant to us; it is a story we all share, from the inside out. Soon I will post a short story along similar lines; U-Turn. estory


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
    EStory, I will most certainly be on the lookout for this , thanks for the heads-up, and be glad in knowing the unknown! May you live with great abundance and unlimited measures of hope!
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Hello Author, this gives me faith for people like my own child, who have trouble believing in things that aren't tangible. Most kids, when they're young, can imagine things and play that way... kids like my son, don't do that, they need tangible things to play with. They don't do the intangibles. :)


 Comment Written 10-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Susan3022, thank you for sharing you, I certain that your presence will be the best tangible he has going for him until such time he can begin to question what is in his heart.
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I like how you told your story; not THAT you told your story, but HOW you told it. I also liked your story. I like how, as a story, it flowed logically and showed an honest progression of the development through the stages of life.

I did not however find it poetic in its presentation. The rhythm was not consistent, or I could not find it, and I could not find any effort to rhyme. Had these been clear and present, this would have earned 5 and possibly 6 stars from me.

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 Comment Written 10-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    As my notes indicate this is free verse, free verse is not restricted to a rhythmic standard, but thank you for your reflection.

reply by Selyob on 10-Apr-2020
    My understanding of "free verse" is such that while it is free of the established definitions of arrangement or syllable counting, this does not mean it is free of those foundational components of writing which separate poetry from prose, namely, rhythm or rhyme.

    I feel most authors of free verse misunderstand this... or perhaps I am the one who missed it.

    Furthermore, poetry ought to be written in such a way as to be easily recognized as a poem by the reader. This is established through the use of poetic tools.

    If you disagree with my understanding, can you define for me what separates prose and poetry in general, and upon what basis you formed that conclusion?

    Also, is there an authoritative source where free verse is defined as not requiring any rhythm at all? If so, I would be glad to correct my review of your poem.

    Lastly, thank you for engaging in a discussion. Too few are interested in, or open to discussing their work, especially in the context of criticisms... yet this is how we learn, right? :)

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Your have given me much to ponder as I am not a professional in any ssense of the word when it comes to poetry. I am very pleased for this engagement, as you say,:it is how we learn" My goal is my work is well accepted by those who read what I post. Therefore, trust in knowing I take your words to heart and will certainly attempt to improve.

reply by Selyob on 10-Apr-2020
    Thank you for not allowing yourself to become offended in my comments. Your sincerity, and desire for improvement is encouraging.

    Like you said, I am by no means a "professional" poet. I only know what I know because of how it was drummed into me by those who are professionals.

    Have you ever seriously considered the mechanics of classical poems such as The Raven, or The Road Not Taken? These both tell stories, like your poem does. Both are of very different styles, and yet they both are very flowing and poetic.

    You said something that I REALLY relate to. You mentioned your measuring stick is how your poems are received by the reader; I'm paraphrasing you of course. This resonates with me deeply, and is why I provide such in depth reviews. Too many people simply pat others on the head, and never truly offer suggestions as to how the poem could have been more pleasing. That is what I try to overcome. Yes, I can write something that feels like 40 grit sand paper on the tongue, but I strive for the silkiness of honey.

    Something you may find entertaining and surely will find challenging is to revisit your poem, any poem, and to rewrite it to make it smoother with regards to rhythm. I have personally found a greater pleasure in the final work, when doing this. Something just feels better about it when it is done... and those I have asked to evaluate the before and after have ALWAYS expressed an appreciation of the revision over the original. Something to think about. :)

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Thanks you again, I have massaged this piece.
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I like the message conveyed in this. I didn't grow up in a nurturing household. I grew up with lots of screaming and yelling and the police at my house every week. I was the most traumatized child mentally and I thought that nobody loved me and that something was wrong with me. Perhaps I'll share the whole story sometime. The fortunate part about this is the happy ending that the Lord came and revealed Himself to me as a lad at my lowest moment. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!


 Comment Written 09-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Jeffrey you and actual share a similar childhood, mine was anything but nurturing. I would love to read your story, writing mine ( Celtic Roots on FS) is starting to unfold and it is healing.
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Faith is definitely something that has to be cultivated and nurtured over time. I enjoyed the way your poem described the process from the simple trust of a child to the grounded faith of man. Well said.


 Comment Written 09-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    June thank you, another weekend forthcoming, be safe and stay well!
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Yes, Faith is believing for things not seen and evidence to behold. I find nothing in the way this poem is written and wish the poet the best in the contest.


 Comment Written 09-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Ben, without Faith I believe life would feel overwhelming especially in times such as we are in.
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Faith evolved for me - Grace saved me!
My Faith

Hello, my friend,

Fine entry for the faith contest. You express the development of your faith very well. Pretty presentation. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 09-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Gypsy, thank you for your comments
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This biographical and chronologic poem shows a very gentle path to God.
The revealing dogma that finally touches our hearts and enters our souls, attaches and clings to us for the rest of our lives as we cradle the Hope we have received. Well done.


 Comment Written 09-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Raff, thank you for your always kind and validating comments. I hope you have plans to get out into the sunshine and may the rays of warm guide you to people that you love.
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I love this entry for the Faith poetry contest because it shows a growth from one verse to the next. Absolutely beautiful presentation of your journey. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 09-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2020
    Minglement, thank you! I believe, if people were honest each of us is on a pilgrimage in our lifetime to arrive with the affirmation that our journey is not and ending but a new beginning.

reply by Minglement on 10-Apr-2020
    I agree with you. I don't know that it's so much 'honesty' as recognition. Take care.
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