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Ominous Portents


Things cannot continue indefinitely...

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Comment by
Joan E.
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Exceptional
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Thank you for sharing your muse's lead and your poignant reflections with us, along with the explosive image. I admired your rhymed quatrains and use of alliteration plus the vivid "potter's wheel" simile. Well done- Joan


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much, Joan -- your review and stars mean the world to me... that would be the world I'm JUST emerging back into after a hellacious migraine: but it is a BEAUTIFUL, SUNSHINY, PAIN-FREE day today -- Between school and my 'lack of focusing ability' over the past three days, I figure I'll be caught up by oh, say, May Day... LOL!! Thank you for everything all the time and take care out there! :) Yvette
    'Everything looks brand new when the veil is lifted' :) :)

reply by Joan E. on 15-Apr-2020
    I am relieved the "veil" has lifted and you are better able to focus. I hope the May Days continue- Joan
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The_Boy_Whodunnit
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A good clear structure with an effortless rhythm and rhyme when reading, which is always hard to achieve, but works really well in this poem. I like how the meaning and purpose of the writing becomes clearer as it goes on.


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much for your review -- it is always good to hear from new voices round the front porch! ;) Take care out there and stop by again sometime! ;) Yvette
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RPSaxena
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Hello Y. M. Roger,
Nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Last but one stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
Best of Luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much, RP -- sorry for the delayed response, but I'm JUST emerging back into the world after a hellacious migraine: but it is a BEAUTIFUL, SUNSHINY, PAIN-FREE day today -- Between school and my 'lack of focusing ability' over the past three days, I figure I'll be caught up by oh, say, May Day... LOL!! Thank you again for your comments and take care out there! :) Yvette
    'Everything looks brand new when the veil is lifted' :) :)

reply by RPSaxena on 16-Apr-2020
    Y.M.Roger, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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nancyjam
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You and your muse did a great job on this one. Great rhyme and meter in this thought provoking piece.
We will get through this.
Happy Easter.
Nancy


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much for your review, Nancy -- so good to hear from you over here! ;) Take care out there, my lady! ;) Yvette
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RShipp
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"But human spirit won't be caged," and "Caution's one thing, control's another," were my favorite two lines.

Your 'muse' was on a roll on this one. I enjoyed.

Best of luck in the Rhyming Poem contest.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thanx much for stopping in on this one, R, twas one that I let the 'darker muse' out to play... he doesn't get out much for obvious reasons - lol! ;) ;) Take care my friend (see, I'm catching up? wink, wink)! ;) Yvette
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BeasPeas
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A very good poem, Yvette. The Stoic philosophers recommend not worrying over things we have no control over. Otherwise, it's wasted energy. I try to think along those lines, too. Our writing, though, is a good outlet to vent our fears of the future. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much, Marilyn -- sorry for the delayed response, but I'm JUST emerging back into the world after a hellacious migraine: but it is a BEAUTIFUL, SUNSHINY, PAIN-FREE day today -- Between school and my 'lack of focusing ability' over the past three days, I figure I'll be caught up by oh, say, May Day... LOL!! Thank you again for your comments and take care out there! :) Yvette
    'Everything looks brand new when the veil is lifted' :) :)
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harmony13
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The author's words are strong, descriptive and creative. I found this
poem to be extremely thought provoking. I found the words of this
poem intense. The artwork goes well with poem.
May you be well and safe.


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much, Harmony -- sorry for the delayed response, but I'm JUST emerging back into the world after a hellacious migraine: but it is a BEAUTIFUL, SUNSHINY, PAIN-FREE day today -- Between school and my 'lack of focusing ability' over the past three days, I figure I'll be caught up by oh, say, May Day... LOL!! Thank you again for your comments and take care out there! :) Yvette
    'Everything looks brand new when the veil is lifted' :) :)
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w.j.debi
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We will overcome is the message I get out of this poem. 'Velvet chains' is an excellent image.
My favorite line:
Caution's on thing, control's another--we do have control!


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much, W.J. -- sorry for the delayed response, but I'm JUST emerging back into the world after a hellacious migraine: but it is a BEAUTIFUL, SUNSHINY, PAIN-FREE day today -- Between school and my 'lack of focusing ability' over the past three days, I figure I'll be caught up by oh, say, May Day... LOL!! Thank you again for your comments and take care out there! :) Yvette
    'Everything looks brand new when the veil is lifted' :) :)
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ExperiencingLiphe
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Sometimes we just have to write what we have to write. I've had many poems turn out in ways I never imagined. But like so many written this way, this was wonderfully written. Great job :)


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much, my lady -- sorry for the delayed response, but I'm JUST emerging back into the world after a hellacious migraine: but it is a BEAUTIFUL, SUNSHINY, PAIN-FREE day today -- Between school and my 'lack of focusing ability' over the past three days, I figure I'll be caught up by oh, say, May Day... LOL!! Thank you again for your comments and take care out there! :) Yvette
    'Everything looks brand new when the veil is lifted' :) :)
Comment by
duchessofdrumborg
An iron fist in a velvet glove
Sharpen your quill every day!
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
"Ominous Portents", is an exceptionally well-written and thought-provoking piece. To me, this is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post,


 Comment Written 11-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
    Thank you so very much, Duchess -- your review and stars mean the world to me... that would be the world I'm JUST emerging back into after a hellacious migraine: but it is a BEAUTIFUL, SUNSHINY, PAIN-FREE day today -- Between school and my 'lack of focusing ability' over the past three days, I figure I'll be caught up by oh, say, May Day... LOL!! Thank you for everything all the time and take care out there! :) Yvette
    'Everything looks brand new when the veil is lifted' :) :)

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 15-Apr-2020
    Yvette, my possum, you take good care of yourself.
    Being a never seen friend is what I enjoy so much.
    God bless and a hug,
    the Duchess :)))
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