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Walter Goes Job Hunting


A retiree look for a job at his wife's insistence,

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Good for you for giving a script a try. I think you've done and admirable job. I love that hubby was able to find a job, even though he was certain he couldn't--and really didn't want to. I love the humor.


 Comment Written 16-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
    Thank you for the review and comment. It was fun to write.
    Beth
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The characters you bring to life are believable and complex, thanks to the natural and realistic dialogue. I really like the rhyme, which gives this script a pace and utilises the sound qualities of the words. Well done!


 Comment Written 16-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
    Beth
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I love this. It's very witty and clever and it didn't take you long to wrap this up and present it to us. This is good work and I enjoyed reading this humorous and well written work. Great job and well done!


 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
    Thank you Jeffery, I really appreciate the review and comments. I so glad you like ti.
    Beth
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Awe, but, Beth, Ithink you've done a wonderful job. I admire you for trying and then do so well and it's funny to boot. Well done! Great entry for the contest and the best of luck. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much Ulla. I almost didn't do it because there are a lot of good entries for the contest. I least I got my feet wet doing a script. I'll have to do two more to get recognized in that catagory. It was kind of fun to do.
    Beth
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Hehaha... out to prove there were no jobs, and yet at the mall he was a perfect 'fit'.

What a great reason to form a few New Year's resolutions!!!

A very enjoyable read!


 Comment Written 14-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm so glad you found it funny.
    Beth
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They took one look and made him a Mall Santa! I didn't see that one coming, Beth... Hahahahahaha!!! That was really funny! I loved the line about he'd been peed on stomped on etc... quite the visual... lol a fun read. This is going to be a tough choice! :)


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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. I'm glad you found it funny.
    Beth
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Hahahahaaa!!!! A really funny ending Beth. My husband had to work for a year and a half after retiring and he did it the best he could. Lol! No fun tho. Now he's just like Walter. Loves to sit. :D Nice work with this script! I won't even try it! x


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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much for the review. I'm so glad you found it funny. It was fun to write. You should try it.
    Beth
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Clever idea for your script. What to do with a retired hubby is a problem. At times it seems like the kitchen isn't big enough for both my husband and me. He always seems to find something to do when I'm preparing dinner. Your solution so clever. Walter finds a great solution, playing Santa, but it isn't very satisfactory to him, for reasons he states. You handled the details of the setting and characters very well. judi


 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. Yes, they do get it the way. When my husband retired before I did while he was home alone he color coordinated all my clothes putting dress clothes with sports clothes and robes together and he arranged all my books by height. LOL
    Beth
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I don't usually read scripts, but I really liked the rhyming flow of this one! The characterisation was very good as was the accompanying humour. Great job with it!


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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. I don't usually read them either and that was the first one I ever tried to write.
    Beth

reply by Bichon on 13-Apr-2020
    You did a very good job!
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Cute!!! I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I would lose weight too. Good luck with the contest.

Christmas is coming, and we need cash.
to put presents under the tree. (does there need to be a comma after cash?)


 Comment Written 13-Apr-2020



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments, It looks like it needs a comma. I'll check it out.
    Beth
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