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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello Raffaelina Lowcock
Your poem is so well expressed of the sadness you feel about the lost of your husband from the Sars epidemic and now the COVi9 virus is reminder and how when you used to think about you husband and your love.
Gert


 Comment Written 06-May-2020



reply by the author on 06-May-2020
    Thank you for a very empathetic review. Your six-stars are very uplifting and appreciated.
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You've written an excellent poem with such emotion. I am sorry you lost your husband to the Sars epidemic. This Pandemic is bringing it all back.
Hugs to you.


 Comment Written 06-May-2020



reply by the author on 06-May-2020
    Thank you for your response. He didn't die of Sars, he was in the hospital with complications of pneumonia during the epidemic and no visitors were allowed. It was a troubling time.
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Louise Michelle
 
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Oh, how horrible for you! On a more positive note, you did a fantastic job with this poem. It grabbed my attention and held it throughout. I hope you find some peaceful moments and stay safe. Hugs, Lou


 Comment Written 06-May-2020



reply by the author on 06-May-2020
    Thank you for your praise of my poem in this review. I am fine now as the days go by I have released my emotions and have ameliorated them with a more positive feeling.
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Franklin Dillard
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Good day to you Ms RAFFAELINA, this is a real wonderful arrangement of words. It gives the reader the excitement reading from the First word to the last. you did a remarkable job.


 Comment Written 06-May-2020



reply by the author on 06-May-2020
    This is a very thoughtful review. Thank you for your insight.
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The poignancy of emotion in your words is very moving. I want to jump through the screen and give you a hug. Isolation is not a good place to be, especially with a pandemic as a backdrop, as it gives rise to far too many uncomfortable memories and also too much time for those memories to resurface and torment you. This is all very clearly put in your poem. The unopened box sneaks open a crack at nighttimes when your defences are low. I'm praying right alongside you, Ralf. xx


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    That is a very heartfelt and empathetic review for which I am most grateful. Thank you for your lovely words.
    When it first happened I was stunned and confused but as each night passed and the memories and the tears persisted I recognized what had happened and remembered how I wanted to be strong for my sons.
    This is definitely a delayed action.

reply by LisaMay on 05-May-2020
    Delayed reactions are intriguing. Being strong for your sons was probably to your own detriment as you are suffering now. I had a similar thing happen to me when my adoptive Mum died when i was 15. It affected my Dad so badly i felt i had to be strong for him. Years later, when I met my birth mother and she wanted me to call her 'mother' I went into a prolonged period of crying and needed to speak to a counsellor. It was all about missing my Mum who raised me and never taking the time to mourn her properly; the tears weren't about meeting my birth mother. Grief needs to be let out, it just won't stay bottled up. I do empathise with your current situation. It is not easy being alone. xx
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A. Louise Robertson
 
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I am so sorry for the pain that the pandemic has brought upon you since your husband was a victim of the Sars epidemic. You have written a beautiful piece which aptly describes that pain and brings home the loneliness you feel now.


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    Thank you for your very heartfelt and empathetic review. He did not die of Sars. It was during the Sars epidemic when visitors were not allowed in hospitals without a dispensation, which caused the very disastrous and hopeless feelings of a deeper loss.
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The voice here was pleading, almost desperate, and the emotions there drove the poem in my opinion. There's a real sense in the repetitions of phrases of circling in this depression, of not being able to escape these feelings of loneliness and loss. "Hidden tears in an unopened box" was the keystone image. You have that sense of the privacy, the hidden emotions inside, and the pain of keeping it to yourself. But also there's an interesting element of the preciousness of those tears. The beauty in the pain. That's what makes it such an interesting image. estory


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    I do love your review. You are so right. At that time those circumstances were horrendous so I felt for the sake of my children that I should focus on my good memories. Ergo, the hidden box of tears and now the Pandemic delves deep within my heart and forces the memory to be confronted. It's not as bad as it seems, it is somewhat remote, but it is definitely front and center and it does hang a heavy veil at night when my mind is open.
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I feel so sorry for your loss. I can understand how this pandemic brings back memories. I love your last two lines in each verse, past, present and then future tense, promising a better future.


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    Thank you for your empathy in this review. It isn't quite as bad as it seems, it feels like a delayed action. I tried back then to banish the awful situation surrounding his death, so now it hits me, but it feels remote.

reply by Susan Larson on 05-May-2020
    Some of us have delayed reactions. When I lost my youngest son, I had other bereaved parents tell me the third year was the worst. And, yes, for me it was. Concentrate on your final line! : )

reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    Thank you.
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Thank you for honestly expressing your feelings during this pandemic. It must bring back very sad memories of what you have lost. It takes courage to wake up each day not refreshed, plagued by fatigue. I hope you will soon find relief as this pandemic begins to subside.


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    Thank you for your empathy, in this kind review.
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Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written Canzonetta poem about the memories you have about your husband died in a similar pandemic as and the isolation makes you restless and nervous.

NS I suggest you find another 'a' rhyme at the beginning because it is the same as the 'd' Rhyme.

Suggestion

I'm having difficulty, I can't sleep(rest)
Because of isolation
The feelings are so very deep(the feelings making me feel stressed


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    Thank you for your empathy and pointer. I believe it is proper now.
    Stay safe.
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