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Matt and Jiffy Join the Army 7

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Boy are we in trouble... and so is Sergent Pig... or is it Sergent Porky? LOL, This ought to be fun, I'm not so sure the sergeant is going to find it much fun though! :)


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reply by the author on 06-May-2020
    They are long suffering.
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I feel sorry Sergeant Porcine having to train them. I have a feeling there will be a lot of hard lessons in their near future. Your script is well-written, interesting, believable.


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    Thanks, MD. I hope to balance their rude awakening with the mercy of a Drill Sergeant.
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It's striking that the sergeant tells the recruits he's receiving and delivering them to Sgt. Porcine. Maybe that's the way they treat them--like packages. Are the recruits really that dumb, or do they just like to be annoying? Matt and Jiffy are edging pretty close to getting into trouble with MacDonald for some of their comments, but he's surely heard them all before. I fear for the nation's safety! Excellent dialogue. judi


 Comment Written 05-May-2020



reply by the author on 05-May-2020
    Thanks, judiverse. I had a head-butting contest yesterday with a veteran who said I was showing disrespect towards the military. He gave me a one star and a stern talking to. What do you think?

reply by judiverse on 05-May-2020
    What was his rank? Maybe you can pull rank on him. He's obviously a newcomer trying to show off. My thought is you're writing humor, and you aren't the first one to poke fun of the military. Several movies come to mind, and what about MASH? judi
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Oh, my word, these young lads aren't going to know what's hit them when they get to the barracks. LOL. This is going to be a fun read, Bill, I was cringing as I was reading what these lads were saying. Now I'm wanting to read the next part. Well done! :)) Sandra xxx


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    Thank you, Sandra
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Uhoh! things are going to get messy very soon Aren't they Bill? The funny little jokes about the Sergeant's name aren't going to last much longer once they get on the plane. Abandon all Hope Ye That Enter Here. The day has dawned and the victims are selected. Talk about shooting fish in a barrel!! I'll be watching this one cheers Cass


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    Thanks, Cass
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Oh, oh. Either the recruits are going to have trouble with Master Sergeant or vice versa. Most likely the recruits will be on lots of work details. I'm surprised the sergeant kept his cool. Clear and interesting work. Marilyn


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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
    Thanks, Marilyn.
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Dear Bill, may God preserve this Country and hope we never have to go to war if our military has even a few of these loose canons in its ranks.
As for your entry, I guess I will have to wait for a few more posts to see if there is anyone I can pray for.


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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
    I?ll repost the first six scenes.

reply by Suzanna Ray on 04-May-2020
    That will help a lot Thanks
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Boy are these guys i for a huge surprise. This reminds me of my first day in the Air Force, the first sergeant we met was soft spoken and amiable. However, every sergeant after that was a fire breathing monster, who had us jumping and looking nervously around for the next two months.


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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
    They are tiered for tolerance from reception, forming, and training.
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Oh, boy! Sergeant Porcine has his work cut out for him. It's wonder that Sergeant McDonald put up with the MickyD comments so calmly. Don't know if these recruits have all their marbles...


 Comment Written 04-May-2020



reply by the author on 04-May-2020
    We?ll see.
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thaities, Rebecca V.
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This is one funny group of ignorant recruits. Bet they about drive their sergeant nuts before he can make soldiers out of them. This is good movie material.


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    I?m going to repost the other six scenes.

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 04-May-2020
    Oh, that would be great! Reminds me of Gomer Pile days. Love it.
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