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He Died That we May Live


Jesus' Love

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l.raven
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Hi Portia, so good to see you my sweet friend...
yes He did...He died to save us...our sins...and
He truly loves us like no other...I think people who
are taking the wrong path...need to wake up...I believe we are in the final days...and He will know the ones who are truly faithful...believing...I love your poem sweet girl...and truly the perfect picture...love you....Linda xxoo

I'm still not on like I would like to be...but still helping my brother with my mom...sigh...soon I hope...love xxoo


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reply by the author on 12-May-2020
    Litnda,

    Hello my dear friend, it is always a blessing to hear from you. I pray is well with you and your loved ones. Continue to take care of your mom and give her a hug for me.

    Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments.
    Have a wonderful and blessed days.

    Lots of love and hugs...Portia

reply by l.raven on 12-May-2020
    Hi Portia, your so welcome beautiful girl..
    mom has good days and she has bad...last night was a bad...but she is better today...thank you so much for your kind words...and you my sweet friend are so welcome...and you have a wonderful and blessed day as well...much love and big hugs back at you...Linda xxoo
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A very nice poem. I like that you zero right in on the theme your poem is about. It's not honey-coated, it's pure and simple! He died so we may live!!!
Nice seeing you sweetie! I hope all is okay with your family!
Love ya lots!
Patty


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reply by the author on 12-May-2020
    Patty,
    How are you doing my dear, I pray all is well with you and your family. Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments.
    Stay safe and well.

    I love you and a (((BIG HUG)))) from across the miles...Portia
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Thank you so much for this lovely spiritual kyrielle sonnet! You made my Sunday more complete to bring my thoughts back to our wonderful Savior and His great Love and redemption!


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reply by the author on 12-May-2020
    Hello my dear friend,
    I am so glad you enjoyed this poem. I am still working trying to get
    the sonnet right. Thanks so much for your support and kindness.

    Hugs...Portia
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Portia,
I wanted to reread your poem over and I found 2 errors you might want to correct. I still want you to have your six stars, because the poem is beautiful.

If this poem is up for a contest it would be nice to correct the small errors.

Grace and mercy ARE his to give it should be, because there is more than 1 noun (grace and mercy).

Rely on Jesus to ‚??instill‚??. Could you use instill His Will. The rhyme sounds even and instill is a verb which must have an object, ‚??his will.‚?? I would love to see your poem win, Portia, that‚??s the only reason I correct poems.
Hugs,
Cindy


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reply by the author on 10-May-2020
    Cindy,

    Thanks so much for such an outstanding review and six star rating in spite of the error. Also, I appreciate the suggestion and will make the necessary corrections. This is not a contest entry, it is one that I wrote last night. Thanks so much for your honest review and kindness.

    Lots of love and Hugs...Portia

reply by Cindy Decker on 10-May-2020
    Portia,
    The irony of my review having typo errors is not lost.
    I loved your beautiful poem.
    You are such a good friend.
    I hope you had a happy mom?s day. Have a wonderful week.
    Hugs,
    Cindy

reply by the author on 10-May-2020
    Thank you my friend.

    Hugs...Portia

reply by Cindy Decker on 10-May-2020
    Your welcome, Portia. They are much deserved. Have a wonderful week. Keep writing your amazing poetry. I hope the quarantine will be over soon. I miss hugs from my great nieces and nephews.
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The writing itself is good. visual and full of thought. However, it does not fit what I know as the requirement for a sonnet. I do like the repetition and think it makes that statement so much stronger.


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reply by the author on 10-May-2020
    Diane,

    Thanks so much for your review, I will continue to try to pen a sonnet until I get it right. I appreciate your honest review.
    Have a wonderful day.

    Blessings...Portia
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Oh, Portia, this is just lovely!! :) ;) It has a great rhyme scheme and the sonnet formatting is strong and rhythmic - the repetition of that 'final' line is a strong reminder of what makes us His! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette


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reply by the author on 10-May-2020
    Yvette,

    Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated. Have a wonderful day.

    Blessings...Portia
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I love the poem, and the refrain! Amen, he died for all that we might live!
However, a sonnet it is not. It is very sonnet like. At least it's not a Petrachan or Shakesperean sonnet, because of the line length (usually 10 syllables, not 8), the uneven meter (trochee vs iambic) and the lack of rhyme for the refrain.
I mention it in case you want to study the form some more. The poem as it stands is lovely and perfect and doesn't need changing.


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reply by the author on 10-May-2020
    Darlene,

    Thanks so much for an honest and kind review. I will continue to try and pen a sonnet until I get it right. Thanks so much my friend and have a wonderful day.

    Blessings...Portia

reply by Darlene Franklin on 11-May-2020
    This isn't the world's best sonnet, and I'm not at all sure if it has themes and volta or whatever right, but I'm pretty sure it has the rhyme and metrical elements right:
    10 syllables per line
    Rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg
    Iambic meter: the FINal MOVEment OF my LIFE?S begun
    With EV?ry INstruMENT I?ve PLAYED emPLOYED

    The final movement of my life's begun
    with every instrument I've played employed
    to showcase all that's done beneath the sun
    before the Son's great songs I'll hear with joy.

    The Spirit's wind sings sweetly through each reed.
    The Son will sound the mighty trumpet blast.
    The Father plucks my strings in times of need.
    Together they weave beauty from my past.

    When life is o?er, the music will not end.
    My age-cracked voice will brighten as before,
    to join the heavenly chorus my intent.
    We'll spread God's love and mercy evermore.

    The music started when I drew first breath
    continues richer, fuller, after death.
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