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A hungry child is also uncomfortable.

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Suzanna Ray
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Dear Joyce, because you reviewed my poem, I wanted to read some of your works too. I'm reviewing this one, not because I like it anymore than the others that I have read, but I just wanted to let you know that I like your work very much; and would like to fan you, with your permission.

As for the merits of this poem, I wanted to compliment you on your courage and bold statements about this subject ! Hunger and homelessness have always been with mankind from the very beginning. Your desire to prick our conscience that we would be more grateful, by sharing some of our prosperity, is a noble one.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
    Thank you kindly, Suzanna,
    I am humble by your kind words. Of course, you can fan my work/poems and I will fan your poems also. I do not write as much as I would like too these days. Life keeps me, busy. I am kind of working on my 3rd book, plus I like to draw and paint. I do have a passion for those who are hungry. I think, we all can do more than we do. I know, I have been blessed by my Creator richly. Another passion of mine is the elderly. I call sixteen seniors every Monday (ages 74 years to 94 years) to check on them. Thanks again for reaching out to me, Suzanna. May our Lord and Savior continue to bless with His Love. Stay safe. Thanks for the review and rating. Happy future writing😊. . . Joyce
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Thank you for reminding us that we have been helped and to pass on the gift. I admired your rhymed quatrains urging us to start by helping hungry children. Warm regards- Joan


 Comment Written 24-May-2020



reply by the author on 24-May-2020
    Thank you, Joan. I appreciate the review, rating and feedback. We have so much to be grateful for in our lives. Stay blessed.
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Wils
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I like poetry that shares a message and this certainly does that. An ongoing problem that unfortunately will remain that way. The rhythm seems a little off in places but still an enjoyable read.
Geoff


 Comment Written 22-May-2020



reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thank you, Geoff. I will revisit it again. Not sure where the rhythm is off, but I will look again, Thank you for your review, rating and feedback. Have a great day.
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January L'Angelle
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Hi Joyce, I really enjoyed this poem. It touched my heart. You are so right, that children all over the world are starving, even in the USA. I liked your rhymes, they all worked and your writing style is perfection. This reads so well. I hope everybody reads this. Well done. -January L.


 Comment Written 22-May-2020



reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thank you so much, January. I appreciate your review, rating and heartfelt feedback. God bless you richly.
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I really like your idea of using poetry to promote a very worthy cause, which is feeding hungry children. It is hard sometimes to know which organization actually does a good job with it. However, I believe " feed the children" has maintained a good name. Thanks to you and every person or church that helps people in worthy causes. Bill


 Comment Written 22-May-2020



reply by the author on 22-May-2020
    Thank you, Bill for your review, rating and heartfelt feedback. Stay blessed.
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Jeffrey L. Michaux
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I love the message conveyed in this. You're absolutely right. We definitely have more than enough even in our current situation to help a hungry child. Those poor darlings should never have to be hungry. I see no excuse for the neglect. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!


 Comment Written 19-May-2020



reply by the author on 19-May-2020
    Hi Jeffrey,
    Thanks for your review and rating. I just have a heart for the children who go to bed hungry. God Bless you richly.
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I know this pandemic emptied the pantries for most of us, and our local food-banks are suffering, because people are unemployed and the help is not there anymore. "We are uncomfortable knowing we can do more.
Hunger is not understood by a child who is poor.
A child only understands my stomach is bare.
The time is now for people to care."


 Comment Written 19-May-2020



reply by the author on 19-May-2020
    Thank you, Iza. I really appreciate your rating and review. I just want to remind others to help if they can. God bless your richly.
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Such a beautiful collection of quatrains in aabb rhyme! :) Your message woven with testimony is a welcome offering for the day - thanx for sharing! ;)


 Comment Written 19-May-2020



reply by the author on 19-May-2020
    Hi Y.M. Roger,
    Thank you very much for my review and rating. I appreciate your comments. Enjoy the rest of your day:-)
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amada
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"Not a path they chose for their life...." This line really touched me, in depth. I think I was in that place, once. Yout poem here is very descriptive and hit heart in the heart, but for sure, sometimes we must be waken up, or remind us. It's great to read your work, Joy.


 Comment Written 19-May-2020



reply by the author on 19-May-2020
    Thank you so much. God bless you.
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This is a heartfelt plea and one that would be well placed on one of the charities' websites. The plight of such children is dire and they need all the help they can get. Thank you for posting. Anything to increase people's awareness is a bonus.


 Comment Written 19-May-2020



reply by the author on 19-May-2020
    Thank you so much!!
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