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Gone Fishin'


Our day on the water, fun and not fun.

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BeasPeas
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What a great story. I enjoyed reading about the rivalry with your dad and your new hubby as well as the sibling rivalry with you and your sister. You've woven the characters well throughout. Great job and good luck in the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 30-May-2020
    Thank you my dear friend. I enjoyed writing it too. Dad finally gave it time and actually helped Cec build our house. My sister...well, that's another story. Hope you are well? Love, Kay XX
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Another beautiful story, my friend, and full of adventure and excitement! The insight into your family and the interaction between their different personalities adds to the interest of your story.

A few suggestions for corrections:

Daddy's best girl caught in the middle.
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Daddy's best girl was caught in the middle.

The hessian bags allow the saltwater to flow through,
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The hessian bags allowed the saltwater to flow through,

Harry dropped the swimming - deck at the back of Wave Runner
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Harry dropped the swimming-deck at the back of Wave Runner.

"Ready Harry? Cec had hold of around sixty-pounds of fish.
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"Ready Harry?" Cec had hold of around sixty-pounds of fish.

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I just loved that your father freed the seagull at the end of the story. It was crazy that you lost so many fish, but it was good that you still had a bag of fish left, to take home. Such memorable family times! Thank you for sharing this remarkable story.


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Hello my friend, Thanks so much for reading, enjoying and editing. I hope you are keeping well, love, Kay.
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How delightful is this? I felt like I was right there with you, enjoying the people (characterized so well) and the day on the waters of Australia! Thank you. I have no cons.


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Hello Margaret, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed my new friend. Love, Kay.
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This just proves that truth is stranger than fiction. I would think the fish falling out of the gunny sack was contrived in a story, but in real life, yep, it sounds like something that would happen to me.
This sounds like a good and a bad day, just as you warned us. Real-life is like this. Best of luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Hello W.J, It sure did happen. But the other bag held many fish to take home. Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Kay.
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I enjoyed your story very much, Kaye. It certainly sounded like a wonderful day fishing on a river in Australia. Nice catch. My sister-in-law and I ran into a similar situation with catfish on Lake Meade in Nevada one night. We couldn't bait our hooks fast enough. LOL Good luck, Dear. Nancy:)


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reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Hello Nancy, Thanks so much for reading, it was a wonderful day and saving the seagull topped it off. Love, Kay.
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This is a fantastic story, Kay. Wish I had a six left. I really felt I was there with you on that fishing trip. (I used to love to go fishing.) I think this is going to do very well in the True Story Contest. Best wishes! xo


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    G'day my friend, glad you went fishing with us! Makes it worth me writing the story. Love, Kay XX
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This is a terrific entry into the contest, K. I got quite a few chuckles starting off with the women folk talking the leg off an iron-pot and back on again.

Lots of great descriptions of the fishing trip and the tension between your husband and father added a little spice.

Your matter of fact ending after all that catch got away, brings it all back to the simple truth--there's fish to clean and cook.

Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.

Gloria


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reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Aw, thank you so much Gloria. I wanted to write this for dad, just like the poem I wrote for him. One has to bring these memories back and record the good times, thanks so much for reading. I loved fishing and my dad did too. Bless you, love, Kay XX
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This is a great true story, Aussie. I enjoyed reading it. Your use of great descriptive words/phrases added to the enjoyment. I felt like I was there with you in the little boat. It seems your dad was fairly cordial to your ne husband this time. I'm glad your husband didn't add anything to what your dad dais to cause a riff. I would not capitalize Pelican. Also early in the story, you wrote . . .family were-->that should be family was. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan


 Comment Written 27-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Hello my friend, Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed. I like to show the Aussie way of life to my readers. We are avid fishermen/women. The night before the wedding, dad refused to come. He gave in and came anyway. He was right. I didn't know I was marrying an alcoholic. It all worked out, he got dried out and we built a house together. We are still in touch and he is 88! Love, Kay XX
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