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The Trip of a Lifetime


A never to be forgotten trip.

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Comment by
Mastery
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Hi Ralf. You were correct in saying this was the time of your life. Outstanding trip with so many perks. It doesn't get much better. I think you have done a great job relating all of this and it was fun to read. It should have won first place. : ) Bob


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Thank you for your fine review and good wishes. It was in first place right up until the last three hours.

    The best part of it was the joy my 'showed on this trip and being with her was a pleasure. She was my soulmate and she passed away two years ago.

    On rereading this I noticed a piece was missing. It was crucial to the story. This new computer has a bad habit sometimes when I click the mouse, a whole sentence will disappear. Here's the missing piece that I have now added back.

    Allen asked me if we wanted tickets to see Celine Dion. I asked Mary and she said, "No Ralf, I really don't like her."

    I said, "Well, I do, so we will see her."

    Later in the piece, while we are at Celine Dion's performance and there is a standing ovation, I look at my sister and she says "I LOVE HER."

    To me that was a very hilarious scenario and very important.

reply by Mastery on 29-May-2020
    :) Bob
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Amanda Louise Davis
 
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This does sound amazing. I have no mprovements to suggest either. I will say only that you don't want an E on the end of Celine's last name. That was literally the only issue I found with this whole wonderful piece.


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Thank you Amanda for a fine review. I will edit. That was rather careless of me. :)Ralf
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Hello Raffaelina Lowcock,
Lovely piece of Biographical Non-Fiction perfectly meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, and beautifully depicting 'from the beginning to the end' a fabulous trip.
These lines are particularly noteworthy:
"Each day proved to be better than the last. We were booked into the Spa for facials, pedicures, manicures, etc. Between wonderful restaurants and three facilitators making sure all went well, we were very happy."
Picture enhances beauty of the story.
Good Luck!


 Comment Written 28-May-2020



reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    What a wonderful review. Thank you so much for your comments, and good wishes.
    I came 2nd in the contest. :)Ralf

reply by RPSaxena on 01-Jun-2020
    Ralf, Most Welcome!
    "..2nd...", Next SURELY 1st!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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Raffaelina: what a wonderful story about your adventures!!!
I like the spa times and your helicopter experience. I'm sure
Celine Dione concert was fabulous. Hope you have tons of
photos. Enjoy your family and be safe. flylikeaneagle


 Comment Written 27-May-2020



reply by the author on 27-May-2020
    Thanks for this review. Yes everything was a great experience as you note. :)Ralf
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They can show you a great time. I was wondering if you were ever given back what you spent. My late spouse and I had something similarbut not to you day. So glad you girls had a blast.


 Comment Written 27-May-2020



reply by the author on 27-May-2020
    We were given back every cent we spent on tips and taxis or whatever extras. Thank you for your review and comments.:)Ralf

reply by Ben Colder on 27-May-2020
    Very good read.
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A very well-written story about a wonderful time you have that stands out this far as the best time of your life. To win something like that is awesome and it is definitely a time to remember.


 Comment Written 27-May-2020



reply by the author on 27-May-2020
    Thank you for this review. Yes, I will never forget it. I have never won anything up until that time and it made me think I was touched by some magical force or perhaps even an angel!
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This sounds like you had a very lovely time with your sister. I bet you did enjoy all the pampering and fun things to do and see. I have never been to that part of CA, but our son lives in San Diego, Ca. and we got to visit him. It was beautiful there too. I am so happy you had a great time. love and blessings, Teri


 Comment Written 26-May-2020



reply by the author on 27-May-2020
    Thank you Teri for your lovely review and blessings. Bless you :)Ralf
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Hi Ralf
What a great story. That certainly would be a trip of a lifetime. That is well written and the details made the story very appealing. That is truly a trip of a lifetime. You got to try the best of all of it including 1st class air
I have never been there for vacation or on a trip.
I have been there several times for management meetings in the past. I always told my employees, "If it weren't for losers, LV would be dark." I always got a good laugh as they lost their money in the casinos.

Your story is great and a wonderful entry for the contest. It looks like a winner to me.

Robert


 Comment Written 25-May-2020



reply by the author on 26-May-2020
    Thanks Robert, for this fine review. I came second. :)Ralf

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 26-May-2020
    You're welcome. I liked your story very much.

    Robert
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What a prize! I'm thrilled for you and your sister that you got to experience the time of your life. I understand how you will never forget it. You did a great job, Raff, telling this story. Your lines read well and fit the prompt to a T. I would not capitalize the word casino and contest (near the top). Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan


 Comment Written 25-May-2020



reply by the author on 26-May-2020
    Thanks, Jan, it was truly the time of our lives.
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Barbaraj1
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This is a great story. I have a niece who is always winning trips. It's just
luck. You did sound as if you had a great time. One small error. No periods in d.u. It's just du


 Comment Written 25-May-2020



reply by the author on 25-May-2020
    That is an error I didn't notice. Thank you for this review and your detailed comments.
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