Unexpected Arirval
Anna's condition becomes life threatening.
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  7 total reviews 
Comment by
CandySoda777
 
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Your story is good, I see why it won it's contest. Although, I do think it was a bit rushed in between, and too long at the beginning. I like the small details you included: the small arguments, the prank, etc. Good job! :)


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
    thxs so much, I just signed in after a bit of a hiatus, I never knew it won.

    lulube
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Iza Deleanu
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I just love this story, and I heard that some twins are having this strange capacity to take over some of the things that the other one is not even aware it's happening :"They would always know without any words, when the other
was needed, no matter how far apart they lived. They
were born together and they knew somehow, they would die
together. They would never be alone. It was as if they shared
the same soul. Soulmates forever."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.


 Comment Written 29-May-2020



reply by the author on 31-May-2020
    thxs for your awesome review
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Katherine M. Kean
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This is an excellent interpreaion of the prompt Twin Soul Soulmate. Not at all what I was expecting, as one usually thinks of the soulmate being love affairs.
I have seen identical twins so close that they speak in harmony, and even invent their own language, that they insist on sharing a bedroom when growing up even when there is the space for them to have a room each. However, I have never seen with my own eyes such transmission of pain from one to the other.
I feel the actual writing could be tightened up a bit, to bring this story into the exceptional category - and the story is so interesting it merits the effort needed.


 Comment Written 29-May-2020



reply by the author on 31-May-2020
    thxs for your awesome comments and tip, I'll take another look
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beizanten
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a lighthearted and good beginning. I love twin closeness and finishing each other words. Love how you describe the beautiful wedding gown. the ending is good


 Comment Written 25-May-2020



reply by the author on 25-May-2020
    thxs for your great comments in this review
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Marjon van Bruggen
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Calle Romani, 14
 
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What a lovely story about the sisters Star and Sheila. Real twins, as it sometimes happens, very close and knowing each other inside out. Touching also the kidney transplant. Soulmates, and a good entry for the contest.


 Comment Written 24-May-2020



reply by the author on 24-May-2020
    thxs so much for your review

reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 24-May-2020
    welcome!
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Alcreator Litt Dear
 
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This promotes a story about twin soul soulmate telling that fortune favours the brave, and one who fights survives; operations were successful, Star and Sheila, they believe they were born together and would die together; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 24-May-2020



reply by the author on 24-May-2020
    thxs for your awesome comments.

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Amanda Louise Davis
 
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This was a nice story and very straight forward. I liked it, and I have no suggestions to make for it to be better. I think it could maybe use a bit more emotion. That aprt of it gets glossed over a bit.


 Comment Written 24-May-2020



reply by the author on 24-May-2020
    thxs for tip and review
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