I felt a texture of warmth as I read your words. The structured rhyme was easily understood and kept in tune with my thoughts as I read. "Send counsel to a friend in need" was the Impact to my desire now, pass it along. Beautiful poem. Best regards.
-I appreciate your note
and like the title of your poem, jaybird.
-A well written poem with
many good examples of how
we can have a brighter day.
-All it takes is caring for others
and the beauty that is around us.
-A very good concluding couplet, too.
-Have a good day and upcoming weekend.
Everything about this is so true, but what strikes me most of all is your opening line "Life's not about the things you do, it is about the things undone." So many gestures can be so easily done, even if just complimented someone on their outfit while waiting in line at the grocery store. Well written.
Dear jaybird, Maybe it's because I am an old timer like you, that this poem resonates with me in both sentiment and philosophy.
If the rhymes are rough in a few places, who cares!
It's the thought that counts
Nice piece of poetry having captivating flow throughout from top to bottom with lovely rhyming scheme, and conveying a worth following message for the betterment of life.
2nd stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Hello, thank for writing and sharing this beautiful and inspiring poem. It is very well written and creative. It is something that I needed to hear about life. I love the last part about life is not about who lost or won. Its about enjoying the sun. Great poem!