Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Status

New Here?
Sign Up
Fast! Three Questions.

Already a member?
Login

Contests

This Sentence Starts The Story
Deadline: In 2 Days

Faith Poetry Contest
Deadline: Jul 22nd

3 Line Poetry Contest
Deadline: Jul 24th

Horror Writing Contest
Deadline: Jul 27th

Tanka Poetry Contest
Deadline: Jul 31st


Writing Classes

0 classes available. Click here locate a class and to learn more.

Rank

Poet: None
Author: None
Novel: None
Reviewer:None
Votes: None






Reviews from
Back in the day


a poem to a song

  5 total reviews 
Comment by
Spangle
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  73 (+1)
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  69
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
As I am now a Tennessee resident, how could I not thoroughly enjoy this song of traveling across the Atlantic and taking up a new life here...no matter how long ago it might have been? Love the artwork, too. Sorry I don't have a six left, Colin. Stay well and safe!


 Comment Written 03-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
    Thanks Janet xxx
Comment by
lyenochka
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  4
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  5
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  2
Script Rating
  Rank:  2
Review Stars
  Rank:  3
 

#5 Ranked Author

#2 Ranked Novelist

#4 Ranked Poet

#2 Ranked Script Writer

#3 Ranked Reviewer
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Oh! Welcome to the US! I'm curious as to why you chose Tennessee. It's further inland and south and usually not the first place to immigrate to.
Enjoyed your song addressing another song, as the narrator exchanged songs as he exchanged countries. I liked the chorus as well as the verses, especially the internal rhyme in the third lines. For singability, you might want to reduce the length of some lines as you have lines as short as 8 syllables and as long as 12.


 Comment Written 02-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
    Thanks Helen xx
Comment by
Sugarray77
Melissa
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  20
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  105
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Hello Colin... I like your immigration song and could hear the tune in my head as it rollicked along. Well done on crafting such a fun and imaginative tune.,poem. Hope you are doing well!!

Melissa


 Comment Written 02-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
    Thanks Melissa, all good and just back to work, hope you are ok.
    I do have a real song that's been recorded in Nashville, it's about a tramp. xx "who can see me"
Comment by
Brenda Henderson
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  222
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  108
Review Stars
  Rank:  317
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Beautiful sentiment. Are you now a Yankee Doodle Dandy? Have you departed England's glorious shores for the great state of Tennessee? In any event I'm certain that your readers will find this treatise delightful. Good work!


 Comment Written 02-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
    ha ha, no just a follow up to a somg about a tramp which has been recorded in Nashville called "who can see me"
Comment by
Pantygynt
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  84
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  4
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  30
 

#4 Ranked Novelist
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
One should not judge a song lyric by metre or syllable count as the music will cover a multitude of sins of that nature. This purports to be the song of an immigrant to America bidding farewell to the old country and embracing new loyalties with vigour and enthusiasm.

The descendants of this fellow and his redheaded Irish colleen are probably all millionaires by now.

My only worry with this one is its length. Four minutes is generally accepted as the maximum desirable these days though of course there are some notable exceptions. One way of cutting it without loss would be to introduce the chorus after every two verses.


 Comment Written 02-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
    Thanks Jim, hope you are ok and will reply to your birthday bash lol
    I do have a real song that's been recorded in Nashville, it's about a tramp. xx "who can see me"

reply by Pantygynt on 10-Jun-2020
    Wow! Fame at last in Nashville. Congratulations. Perhaps you will sing for my birthday, yes?

reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
    HA HA YES DEFINITELY AFTER A FEW BEARS LOL
  -1-   Next Page 


Market your book.
Advertising options.
This is a test post - Test Submit
This is a test post - Test Submit


Share or Bookmark
  Contact Us | En español | Advertise With Us

© 2015 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy