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The Magic of Love


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Joan E.
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I admired your love poem and beautiful presentation. I enjoyed your free verse and especially liked your description of "Unsettled when apart...content together." Cheers- Joan


 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
    Thank you, Joan. It means a lot to hear that from you. I am grateful.
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Hello Ralf. You have captured the essence of love. There are many kinds of love in the Greek language. The kind of love in the human condition is the kind that lasts. Your last two sentences are the essential principles of love.

Good luck in the contest.

Robert


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
    Thanks, Robert for this review. I came second. :)Ralf
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Mrs. KT
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Hello Raffaelina!
I believe in the sentiments you share in your well-crafted free verse poem!
My husband and I will be celebrating our 41st wedding anniversary on June 30th. More in love today than all our yesterdays...

Thank you for sharing!
diane


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    It's a great feeling, isn't it? Having gone that far together you've experienced it all. Knowing when you look into his eyes that you've both endured and surpassed any problems. You have faith that you will always be together. Thanks and Congratulations.
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This is lovely, Ralf. Usually I don't like free verse poetry, but I love love love this poem. No pun intended. I have a good friend whose brother once said to me, "I think love is when being with someone makes you happy." This definition is from a guy who 1) cheated on his wife 2) doesn't have kids and doesn't want them. My kids REGULARLY make me unhappy, yet I love them all the same. I love that your poem is MY definition of love - when SOMEONE ELSE'S HAPPINESS MAKES YOU HAPPY. Kudos! If I hadn't run out of six stars, I would have clicked that instead of "five."


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    I love your review because it is straight from your heart. You are not hiding your feelings, you are sharing them. Thanks Aiona, very uplifting.
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Pam (respa)
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-Beautiful image and
very nice presentation, Ralf.
-A well written poem with
very good descriptions of
what love means to you.
-It should bring the best out in us.
-I like your concluding lines
very much, too.
-Hope you do well in the contest.


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    Thanks, Pam, I came second. Your review is very uplifting and appreciated. :)Ralf

reply by Pam (respa) on 05-Jun-2020
    Congratulations. It was a very good poem, and you are very welcome for the review.

reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    Thanks.

reply by Pam (respa) on 05-Jun-2020
    😊
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Excellent poem for the "what is love" contest. You have expressed it with a lot of feeling and elegance and wisdom. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. Bill


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    Thank you for this uplifting review.
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Boogienights
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This is a lovely poem, it talks of so much that I've experienced since meeting my husband. When love enters in, selfishness goes out, as your poem says. I think this is a wonderful contest entry, the best of luck to you.


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    Thank you for your uplifting review. Much appreciated.

reply by Boogienights on 05-Jun-2020
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"The Magic of Love", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest!


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    What an uplifting review. Thank you.
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Margaret Bednar
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I think this free verse is a little too "free". This form still uses poetic devices and I'd like to see that applied to a bit more here. Your sentiments of love are nice, I think this just needs a bit more creativity - you are almost there. Too many "the's, and filler words -

Just an example (take of it what you will) of how that last stanza can be structured leaving out superfluous words... I hope you don't mind. And there are numerous ways you can reword this, of course. Just thought I'd show you what I mean (I used the thesaurus to find another word for "best". )

Love inspires with a spirit energized,
magically transforms one's heart and soul
and soars, transcendent.

What I just typed can use some work. But it's a start of what I was trying to explain.

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 Comment Written 04-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    Thank you for your detailed attention to this poem. I am afraid I don't agree.
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Liz O'Neill
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This is a different approach than some I've read. It has the gentle commitment tone to it. Also addressed here which will draw the reader in are the positive outcomes from such a relationship. This is lovely.


 Comment Written 04-Jun-2020



reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    Thank you for your uplifting review. It means so much to me.
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