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Erica - part I


The return of Erica of Marylebone

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A great beginning with likable characters! I remember this character from one of your books many moons ago. I like how you created a mix of contemporary reality with a superhero/mythological universe.

Suggestions if you wanted to keep to the archaic English:
"I thought thee would be bigger." (I thought thou wouldst) subject here
But when the Lords command... thou know?" (knowest thou?) You use the verb - subject inversion later in "Hast thou"


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2022



reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
    Many thanks for checking this one out. It was a while ago. lol

reply by lyenochka on 26-Jan-2022
    I had to search your portfolio to find one that was at 25 reviews. Great job with this one!
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I love this story and can't wait for the next installment. It is well written and I thought the end hook worked well. It left the chapter on a cliff-hanger. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.


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Erica sounds like quite a character but she smart enough not to call attention to herself. U-Tor on the other hand, seem quite out of place in the is setting. It sounds like someone should have prepared him for making an entrance into modern time. I'll try t catch this story again.


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2020


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I enjoyed reading about Eric of Marylebone again, and now she has an oversized side kick to aid her. Can't quite decide if- A rumble shook the ground, followed by a high-pitched screech and floods of steam.- is simply the train or what. Guess we'll find out. Good read G,
cheers


 Comment Written 08-Jul-2020


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The attention to detail and the personality to put in the dialogue, especially the scruffy, archaic U-Tor and the nonchallante, composed Erica made this piece. There's a great contrast between the two. I loved how you set the scene in this familiar train station absorbed in the daily goings on of life, and then suddenly inject the ancient warrior who is so out of place. There's a touch of wonderful humor here. Erica seems her self assured self, but you also have her a bit attracted physically to U-Tor, it seems. It sets up some good possibilities for future chapters and you had a great suspenseful ending. Great hints at some disturbance in the nature of the world ends with the apple cart getting upset estory


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Ah, so Erica is back and with a new companion. U-Tor should be an interesting addition to this world, especially since he is so ready and eager for battle to begin. Erica is going to have her hands full watching for danger and acquainting U-Tor with his surroundings. I look forward to the next chapter of their adventure.


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A marvellous character G, I thought that Erica of Marylebone was fascinating enough, but now you've brought in another more believable character in U-Tor a massive warrior from the mists of time. Beautifully written My friend, you show real perceptiveness in this, well done, blessings Roy


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Hi Gareth, yes, I did read the series back then and I liked it. And then it stopped, But now she's back and I like it. She's less private this time round. I'm looking forward to see where this is going. Well written. All best. Ulla:)))


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I remember the when you posted the first series. I enjoyed reading this one. You defined your characters well. I like the dialogue, too. In addition, I like the introduction of the new character. My favorite line is when she says . . .I thought you'd be smarter. Thanks for sharing. I will follow the next chapter.
Respectfully, Jan


 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020


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I'm not a fan of fantasy, and am too long in the tooth for young adult reads, but while looking for something to review, I thought I'd try this one, and I'm so glad I did.

You paint a good picture for us of the scene at the station, and of the characters.

The dialog between the characters is very funny, and keeps up a good pace, there are no spare words, it's kept very tight.

The only point I'd like to make is "her always hot coffee". How is it always hot? Is it some power she has or does the vendor always sell it hot and she drinks it before it cools down? Ridiculous, I know, but it's the only thing that made me hesitate while reading.

I've not read any previous work on your character, but I would like to follow this story. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.


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