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Hold your fire!

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Comment by
Lorraine Jackson
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This was an interesting and humorous story that flowed smoothly from the beginning to the end with the use of 'tight' language. It's good John's friends found him when they did, or the story may have ended differently. As the daughter of a hunter, I know you are right. Hunting cannot be taken lightly. Good story.


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your review and your knowledgeable comments. I do appreciate your words.

    Ralf
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Cynthia Adams1
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Yours is a very interesting and attention-holidng story. I liked it when you said: "Now this is John's story" (with a wink.)
I don't know what the other guys' stories were but I like John's. :)

"grass was hitting the tops of my calves" is a really nice sense image. Any of us, like myself, who grew up walking in fields has that image etched into our memories.
I also liked the image of the "clomping hooves." Clomping is a good work because it sounds like what it is. (I know there's a word that refers to words that sound like the sound they make but I can't remember what it is.)
I loved the honest of John's story. It could have been more exaggerated but that would only have made it smaller, not bigger.
Excellent job.


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
    Thank you for such a detailed review. Very pleasing for me to read and I do appreciate your words.

reply by Cynthia Adams1 on 30-Oct-2020
    You are very welcome. I just re-read my comments and I see I made two typos. I proofread my comments before I sent them too...I must be losing it :)

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
    You're not the only one. We all make typing errors.
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Carmen Ducharme
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Thank you for sharing your cute little story .I find it so funny how when a man is telling a story it always gets stretched out fabricated like " the fish story that got away lol Loved it good luck in the contest


 Comment Written 30-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your charming review. I do appreciate your comments. I suppose it depends on the votes. LOL

    Ralf

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pome lover
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well, that is some story with quite a build-up.
I thought, for sure, you were going to say, when the gun went off, it hit a cow. But I'm sure you're thankful that it didn't. A mounted Hereford head on the wall wouldn't be very cool. :) just kidding.
It did sound, however, like your husband and friends had a lot of fun in their spontaneous weekends. And you're a patient and loyal wife!
An enjoyable read.
pome lover


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    Thank you for a very interesting review. I'm thankful they didn't hit a cow.LOL
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equestrik
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This is hilarious! It is well told and a very wonderful and fun break from the seriousness of most writings and goings on today. Super job and a good write for the short story contest!


 Comment Written 02-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your splendid review. I appreciate your thoughts.
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Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written short story about an amateur hunting trip that nearly ended tragically, but he was lucky to survive and tell the story about the one and only hunting trip.


 Comment Written 02-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your review. It is much appreciated.
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RPSaxena
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Hello Friend,
Nice story incorporating familiar flavor, and narrated in a natural way!
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme wording, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.


 Comment Written 02-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
    You have rendered a perfect review. Thank you for your expert
    analysis and truly thank you for the six stars.

    :)Ralf

reply by RPSaxena on 08-Oct-2020
    Friend, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP

reply by RPSaxena on 08-Oct-2020
    Friend, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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Mary Vigasin
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I bet John's friends never let him forget this story for years to come.
Well done and entertaining story and you were able to tell John's story very well.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your POV. You are right in this review.
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Dear Mystery Writer,

Wow. I can only imagine the fear your husband was experiencing. I know from personal experience, you do not want to be in the same pasture or field with many bulls. They have a tendency to be persnickety. You just never know what will set them off! haha

A note:
**As I said before, none of them were proficient at hunting it was just a "let's do it" occasion, the spur of the moment idea. (suggest:)
--> As I said before, none of them were proficient at hunting(;) it was just a "let's do it", spur of the moment idea.

Thanks and good luck!



 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
    Thanks, for your interesting review and help.


reply by robyn corum on 29-Sep-2020
    oops. Be careful not to sign your name on this one...

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reply by robyn corum on 29-Sep-2020
    I wouldn?t worry about it. No one can see any of these reviews so no one will see this one. (At least until after the vote.) I only suggest not signing other reviews w your name. Yeah??
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What an interesting life you've led. I only wish I had imaginative friends like you did, I did once, but there's a difference between imaginative and crazy, and I think we had crazy friends. Well done, I loved your article and your interesting friends, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
    You are very kind in your review, thank you, Roy. I appreciate your interest.

    Ralf

reply by royowen on 29-Sep-2020
    My pleasure Ralf
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