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Hold your fire!

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Comment by
Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written short story about an amateur hunting trip that nearly ended tragically, but he was lucky to survive and tell the story about the one and only hunting trip.


 Comment Written 02-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your review. It is much appreciated.
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RPSaxena
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Hello Friend,
Nice story incorporating familiar flavor, and narrated in a natural way!
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme wording, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.


 Comment Written 02-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
    You have rendered a perfect review. Thank you for your expert
    analysis and truly thank you for the six stars.


reply by RPSaxena on 08-Oct-2020
    Friend, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP

reply by RPSaxena on 08-Oct-2020
    Friend, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
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Mary Vigasin
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I bet John's friends never let him forget this story for years to come.
Well done and entertaining story and you were able to tell John's story very well.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your POV. You are right in this review.
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robyn corum
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Dear Mystery Writer,

Wow. I can only imagine the fear your husband was experiencing. I know from personal experience, you do not want to be in the same pasture or field with many bulls. They have a tendency to be persnickety. You just never know what will set them off! haha

A note:
**As I said before, none of them were proficient at hunting it was just a "let's do it" occasion, the spur of the moment idea. (suggest:)
--> As I said before, none of them were proficient at hunting(;) it was just a "let's do it", spur of the moment idea.

Thanks and good luck!



 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
    Thanks, for your interesting review and help.


reply by robyn corum on 29-Sep-2020
    oops. Be careful not to sign your name on this one...

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reply by robyn corum on 29-Sep-2020
    I wouldn?t worry about it. No one can see any of these reviews so no one will see this one. (At least until after the vote.) I only suggest not signing other reviews w your name. Yeah??
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royowen
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What an interesting life you've led. I only wish I had imaginative friends like you did, I did once, but there's a difference between imaginative and crazy, and I think we had crazy friends. Well done, I loved your article and your interesting friends, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
    You are very kind in your review, thank you, Roy. I appreciate your interest.


reply by royowen on 29-Sep-2020
    My pleasure Ralf
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thaities, Rebecca V.
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This is a strong entry for the Short Story contest entry writing prompt. It is easy to read understand, and is an enjoyable read. It should do well in the contest, and I wish you the best of luck!


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
    Thank you for your comments regarding this story and your benevolent wishes.


reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 19-Jul-2020
    You're welcome.
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Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the Short Story contest.
This story is well told, clear and easy to follow.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
    Thank you for your comments in this review about The Story.
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sibhus
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It's good story and totally believable, as I have heard similar stories from friends, relatives, co-workers and annoying supervisors. I'm not sure where you are from, but most places crows are not hunted. Pheasants, grouse, partridge, ducks, geese, and pigeons might be good. When bird hunting a shotgun is the best way to knock birds out of the sky. A 22 fires a single small caliber bullet that makes hard to hit a bird on the wing. A shotgun fires a cluster of small pellets then gives you a bigger field, enabling you take a bird down on the fly. It's a good story and makes for a great entry for the contest, these are just some thoughts.


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
    Thank you for your knowledgeable review. As indicated their knowledge of hunting was zilch.
Comment by
2019 Poet of the Year
Dolly'sPoems
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This is a story that will not be forgotten in a hurry and fodder for future tea parties. Being in a filed full of cows is a bit scary and I have been there and you do have to be careful, but more importantly guns can cause some terrible accidents too! Fortunately no one was harmed in this adventure, I enjoyed your post, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
    Thank you for the interest shown in this story. Yes, the good news was that no one was hurt.
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Spitfire
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Because of the opening I kept looking for exaggeration in the story. I'm guessing it was the bit about cows and bulls stomping toward him. I could see the bulls, but cows? Well, maybe. The best part is the bit about mounting the rifle. LOL


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
    I doubt you could call lit a stampede, but you do have a point.
    Thank you for the review.
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