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The GPS


Technology for the morality-impaired

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Elizabeth Emerald
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Congratssssss on your well-deserved win. This is a tour de force in wit with a serious morality lesson. I missed the release--so glad I caught up to this masterpiece. Cheerssssss. LIZ


 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
    Thanks for the generous rating and the kind review.
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blondie560
 
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Loved it! It was humorous and kinda deep at the same time. But I've often yelled at and called Siri names when I'm trying to dictate a message and "she" doesn't seem to understand!


 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
    Thanks so much for the generous rating. I often argue with my GPS, so this one wasn't too much of a stretch.
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Mark,

Wow. For $1,200, that is an amazing piece of technology. I hope that will son be coming standard? Or is that too much to hope for?

*smile*

This was so terrific. I'm glad to find another of your pieces - you are not writing enough - well, that I know of. I'll have to go check for other hidden nuggets. Congrats on this one!


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020
    A combination of not feeling inspired and being busy has kept me from posting much lately. But, encouraging reviews like this, along with the occasional Amazon gift card, may get me writing more.

    Thanks for the encouragement!
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Wils
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I'll never trust my GPS again. This had me in stitches right from the start. A very cleverly written piece. Congratulations on the well deserved win.
Geoff


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
    Thanks Geoff. While it was a fiction piece, I have often had arguments with my GPS in real life, so it didn't take too much imagination to write.
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
    Thanks so much!!
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pome lover
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What an imagination!
Great idea, a conversation (and altercation) with one's GPS. And the personalities - realistic and funny while providing a moral.
I always enjoy what your fertile mind comes up with.
This is a good one. Congrats on being recognized.
Katharine - pome lover


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
    Thanks Katharine. I'm used to arguing with my GPS, so this one wasn't too much of a stretch.

reply by pome lover on 13-Jul-2020
    at least you're out and about. My granddaughter is practically sitting on my head!
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estory
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There's an eerie feel to this conversation with a computerized conscience; it reminds me of HAL in 2001 Space Odyssey. I think you gave the gps a cunning manipulative personality here, a moral superiority in the perfection of logic and a know all scope that makes escape impossible. I also liked the frustrated anxiety of the driver. Together they make up some great counterpoint in the dialogue. It really makes one think of what might be in all our futures....estory


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
    Thanks - it is a bit eerie how much the internet seems to know about us.
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Most entertaining! Only a small step from reality. My wife always says 'please' and 'thank you' to Alexa, and I frequently swear at the GPS when it gives a particularly inane instruction. Clearly, I would do well to watch my language - not to mention my morals. I would say 'Good luck in the contest,' but I don't think you'll need luck. Congratulations, in advance!


 Comment Written 11-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
    Thanks Tony - I've been known to berate the gps with a swear word or two also - probably why I get lost so much.
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I'm stingy with stars, but I loved this piece! It's clever and humorous and sobering...at the same time. What a great entry for the "Dialogue Only" contest! I once was driving to a Texas lake, depending on my GPS, and was led into Oklahoma. The GPS directed me into a barbed wire fence! Then it could NOT recalculate. I must have had the DX version.

I loved the GPS saying, "I've been around the block a time or two." That works on several levels.

On one hand, this seems so "big brother-ish." On the other hand, in a world of relativism and "my rights, it seems like a marvelous piece of equipment that should be "mandatory equipment" on every car unless you can prove you have a working moral compass. Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 10-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
    Thanks so much for this thorough review - made my day!

reply by Melissa Russell Deur on 13-Jul-2020
    You are welcome! And thank YOU for the reviewer nomination!
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Noo-noo noo-noo (sorry that's supposed to be an abbreviation for The Twilight Zone theme)

So I have been on that drive, where the GPS starts giving bogus directions, but never Bogart directions. (Shoulda got the LX)

In such a short piece, the flavour of the dialogue goes from railing at the standard robot Miss GPS, through a bit of a HAL phase - with a very real threat to take the whole box and dice into the Twilight Zone - and then the chappy go lucky Bogey ("better straighten up and fly right" ) brings the driver back to the real thing.

It felt a bit Stephen King at one point: commonplace made bizarre; standard made threatening, and by the time I got to the end of it, I was feeling a whole bunch of vibes harking back to golden age sci-fi and I realised that most of that was just recognising a masterful approach to storytelling within a limiting format. Dialogue only in this case.

I was doing my usual sloppy browse for good stuff so I didn't realise that was the format at first and I was drawn in to the narrative so quickly and deeply that I didn't ask questions until the end. Setting up to review, I said "Boy, you took that corner at 90 in a 60 zone" but when I saw the dialogue only sticker on the story vehicle I said "I'm not even mad"

There's a decent short story, maybe a novella in that concept. The signposts and turns work beautifully, and would only be strengthened by the other stuff that could or couldn't happen. Jeez man, you did character development on a GPS.

Thanks.


 Comment Written 10-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 10-Jul-2020
    Thanks for this really thoughtful review. Yeah, it's hard to communicate the internal machinations that might be responsible for a character's changing attitudes when you can only work with dialogue. There are a few people on this site (humpwhistle for one) who are really good at that. I'm still a novice at the dialogue only stories.
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