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Refugees in for a shock.

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This is better than meets the eye...soo much to interpretation, yet so much to own truths. A piercing group of words which many may not like to address, but there are areas which cannot be denied.
Well done....I value the poem itself which is well worked in terms of short stabbing bullet points that reach the mark, regardless of the subject matter ...a strong delivery.
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 Comment Written 25-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
    Hello RG, Many thanks for reading. It's a hot topic that needs to be addressed. These people came through the back door, so to speak. If they had of applied for a visa it would have been a different story. Bless you my friend, Kay xx
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How sad to move for greener pastures and end up in jail.

I like the glow of the story.
The choice of image is equally blended.

Well done keep us reading and enjoying your insights


 Comment Written 25-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
    Hello Chanya, Thanks for reading. I looked up Diani - a beautiful photo of the beach in Kenya. Lucky you. Blessings, k.

reply by CHANYA MASHENGU on 26-Jul-2020
    I hope one day you will have the coirage to travel to Africa,so I can host you.

reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
    My dear Chanya, I am 75 years old, in a wheelchair. I am an amputee, lost my leg many years ago. When I was younger, I traveled the World. I thank you kindly for your sweet offer. I would love to see Africa in all it's glory. You could come to Australia! I can't walk my friend :-)) XX Kay.
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Yes, the lot of the refugee is not a pleasant one. I can't imagine how awful it must be not to have a country to belong to, let along a home and a job and a community within which one feels welcomed.

Excellent story in a poem, and albeit a sad poem, it is an important social commentary.

Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.

Gloria


 Comment Written 23-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
    Good evening my friend, Thanks so much for reading and your kind comments. It is a catch 22 can't send them back to war zones, can't keep them imprisoned for years. We are blessed to have our country. Bet your glad you're not in America! Love, K.
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Hi Kace, I don't have the answers to how to help all those people...I have seen what goes on in a lot of their counties...and I don't know how to solve their problems... to make them want to stay in their homes...
America does a lot of the things Australia does to keep them out...they stop them before they get here...put them up in small projects...I feel bad for them...I wish I were billionaire ...I would build another boys and girls town...and one for babies...and after I found out the people who wanted to adopt them were good people...I would give them the children free...I would open a home for old people who have nowhere to go...and only the best people would work there...anyone who couldn't smile...and be happy with the people would go...it would be a nursing home...but a happy place to be...old people with nowhere to go...and no one to come and see them...don't need someone around them who don't like who they are...

I would help all the people I could...but I would have to put the money in their hands...donated money...the better part goes to CEO'S...red cross...if you give a 1.00...25% goes to help the people...75% goes to the ceo's...found that out after one of the hurricanes we had here...sigh...very well written story/poem sweet girl...and your picture says it all...my sweet friend...love much...Linda xxoo





 Comment Written 23-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
    I appreciate your sentiments; no real answer, it is a catch 22 situation. Can't send them back to war zones. They have to be processed to make sure they are not terrorists. Big hugs, hope all is well? Much love US2 XX

reply by l.raven on 25-Jul-2020
    doing well...But I do have my days...and your welcome sweet girl...

    hope all is well with you...bigger hugs back...and always much love...xxoo
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You did a great job with a serious and tragic topic, Aussie. Your contest entry reads well with good rhymes, smooth flow, and great imagery. The story told is poignant, I can't imagine being on those boats headed for a new life only to find out it was all a lie.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan


 Comment Written 23-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
    Thanks for reading Jan. There isn't any real answers. They have to be processed to make sure they aren't terrorists. But it takes too long. Camps remind me of Hitler. Best wishes back at you my friend K xx
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Your words give the refugees a voice, their struggle to begin a new life is felt and seen in your poem. It is so sad that many of them end up in prison on an island. Excellent story in a poem that impacts the reader


 Comment Written 23-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
    Thanks so much Elaine. It is a sad situation and there are no answers. They have to be processed to make sure they are not terrorists. I guess they should have applied to come on a visa. Love, Kay.
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How devastating? Good luck in the contest, Kace. I guess it happens in every country, it just seems that some countries share the news while others hide it. They hide their refugees as well and do not want the rest of the world to know their deceit and shame. Very well done.


 Comment Written 23-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
    Hello my friend, it is a real mess with no answers. Shame on our Govt. So many Aussies have offered to take them in. Blessings, Kay.

reply by aryr on 25-Jul-2020
    You are so welcome. I totally agree and mess is not even close enough in the description.
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What a horrible situation! Should not be surprising, however, as there is so much darkness running rampant around the world. Still, there is always the chance that broadcasting such happenings in any way possible might somehow bring relief to those victims at some point. I am glad you have shared this information, Kay.


 Comment Written 22-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
    Hello my friend, thanks for reading. This has been going on for years. They were originally put on Manus Island off the coast, now it is Christmas Island. Where possible, the children born here are accepted. There is no answer; can't turn the leaky boats back. XXK.
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This is well written but so sad I could hardly finish reading it. Your illustration, of course, sets the stage for your words. I had no idea of this travesty. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 22-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
    This situation has been going on for years. They have been housed on our outer islands. There is no answers. The whites need to walk a mile in their shoes. Thanks for reading Kxx
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And people complain about how American treats refugees. The media sure doesn't report this kind of treatment of people. Is this all people who come there or just illegally?


 Comment Written 22-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
    Earl, It's all the people who want to sneak in the back door without being a proper traveler with papers. I don't think our treatment has enough coverage in the newspapers. Children born here of migrants are treated well. I think Oz is scared of terrorists coming illegally. Thank you, Kay xx
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