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A Reversal of Spirit


A changing heart

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Gert sherwood
 
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Your poem about emotions of how one feel about Fears I find is so true when Quote from what you said--

from this frozen state of isolation
Slowly a sort of sunny Spring appears.
Gert
The best to you my Fanstory friend in the contest.


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Thank you Gert.

reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Gert, I came third.

reply by Gert sherwood on 03-Aug-2020
    Hello Raf
    I'm so pleased that you came in third.
    Gert

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Your lovely, deeply spiritual sonnet vividly describes how heartfelt prayer
of a trusting believer can create a new mindset--from dark thoughts and despair to newfound joy.


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your intelligent interpretation of my poem. Time and prayer heal all.

    Ralf
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Very nice. I like the imagery you've painted of a broken heart or relationship but then the recovery and determination to go on. The last line is meaningful and shows a determination to heal. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 01-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
    I am pleased with your articulate review. Thank you.
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dear author,




what a wonderful piece of work!! my favorite part is,
There is a Wintry chill within the air,
Inches of ice have formed around my heart,
A creeping crawling coldness of despair.

I love it!!!!


 Comment Written 01-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much. Your warm review thrills me.

    Ralf
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Raffaelina--
My problem with your poems is...a why? problem. Why are you shutting out the world to begin with? You then pray, but why? What has changed? It seems you have decided your apartness is not "good," or, somehow, like winter. I see the contest you have entered is about feelings, but I need to knowing something about the roots of those feelings.

Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff


 Comment Written 01-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
    If you can't tell then it's not doing what it's supposed to do. It's a contest about feelings. These are the feelings of someone who has parted with someone she loves and slowly she gets over her despair.
    It happens.
    Thanks for your interest.
    Ralf
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The author's words are heartfelt, descriptive and creative. I found the
words of this poem leading to a more positive place. I though about
the days when I feel down and then motivate myself to get back on
track! Great Poem! Have a good evening!


 Comment Written 29-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
    Thank you for your positive review. I do appreciate your kind words.

    Ralf
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about deep feelings in our heart that only we can process on our own. We need the time to search our soul and decide what we really want from life.


 Comment Written 29-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
    Yes, you have latched on to the meaning. Thank you so much for your reading.

    Ralf
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I enjoyed the walk through the seasons and your emotions here Raffaelina and your conclusion to keep your sanity, your have a mixed meter here with good rhymes, much enjoyed, love Dolly


 Comment Written 29-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
    I am pleased that you enjoyed this poem. Your comments are
    encouraging. Thank you. and bless you.
    ;)Ralf
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This is beautifully done, and you had my vote. Great descriptive imagery and visuals, I liked the depths of it, the artistic presentation and fantastic photo.

This has the makings of a very fine sonnet, except at some spots your iambic meter is off. The work could also benefit from some punctuation. I'd like to present my suggestions already incorporated:

Receding from the world I stay apart,
There is a wintry chill within the air;
The ice has formed in inches 'round my heart,
A creeping, crawling coldness of despair.

I pray for a reversal and redemption
And, day by day I lose my many fears
from frozen state of utter isolation
and slowly a sunny Spring appears.

And now my Summer heart is on display -
The melting ice that sprays like falling rain
will clean the places that are in my way
with blossomed paths that lead to love again.

This time I'll stay the course without delay
To keep my sanity, no more dismay.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
    Thank you for your fine review. Yes I know it falls just short of a Sonnet that's why i entered here. I am musing about your suggestions. I do appreciate your generous interest.

reply by Eternal Muse on 29-Jul-2020
    It really IS a fine sonnet, just off iambic meter in some spots. I hope you didn't mind my suggestions. Sonnet is my favorite form.

reply by Eternal Muse on 29-Jul-2020
    That line could be, also:

    "The ice, in inches, formed around my heart"
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Hello, anonymous,

A fine entry for the Feelings Poetry writing prompt contest. Exploring emotions is a great theme.

I like the way you used the seasons of the year to express your emotions.

Nice presentation too.

Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2020



reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
    Thank you for your review and compliments. I am
    grateful.
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