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The times sure are changing

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Another wonderful poem that totally describes these times that we are living in.
The young are totally absorbed in technology. An excellent write. Take care. Jen.


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jaybird1 you are so right
The times sure are changing especially when you have 3 grown adults 4 grand children from the ages 30 plus, have a tendency to forget us oldies need some attention. Unless you yourself give them some way to make them remember that we are here.
Gert


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Hello Jaybird.

This is an accurate picture of how our society views older and sometimes forgotten people. Many civilizations honor the older citizens because of how much they have experienced.

Robert


 Comment Written 30-Jul-2020


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That was amazing and I really love how you showed your point of view with how people are acting these days! It shows that people see life right now as an opsticle and they are trying to figure there way out but there is no escape! But, when it gets to late they have already missed the wonderful things that life has put in front of them!


 Comment Written 30-Jul-2020


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Jay, you've written a sad and very profound poem. (And, sadly, so true!)
I"m not yet 60 (for another month!) but notice that the kids are all so busy. And when they are here, they're on electronics the whole time. Such a strange thing! I can remember sitting with my grandparents and listening to their stories of childhood and early marriage and had hoped to share that with mine. But who can compete with YouTube and SnapCat? *sigh*
Hang in there, my friend. We're listening. Small solace, but we value your words and ideas more than you know.
Could you share some experiences from yur childhood here? I'd love to hear.
Blessings,
Deb


 Comment Written 30-Jul-2020


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Such a raw, honest poem about missing meaningful connection. Some of the younger folk might relate to this but anyone above 60 definitely know what you mean. While it has a very personal tone, it touches on so many important social problems: the isolation of retired people and technology replacing real human connections. Sometime we feel the loneliness in the company of others.

I hope they learn the value of connection! I also hope you still feel valued!
Warmly,


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I like your poem because it is very simple and easy to understand. It rhymes well except for the last sentence of the third paragraph.

It could be:
and that excludes old folk, like me literally.

Just a suggestion. I'm main a short story writer and novelist. I also work as a software engineer.



 Comment Written 30-Jul-2020


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I can certainly relate to your well penned sad scenario. I partially blame it on technology. At times I find it difficult to relate to my grandchildren.
I consider myself fortunate to be a baby boomer. I wouldn't trade my generation for the chaos of today.
Great job overall!


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I can identify, Jaybird! You have a lovely style and I'm planning on reading your sonnets, as I am a sonnet writer myself. Thanks for this wonderful coffee break, and keep writing! You have a fan!


 Comment Written 30-Jul-2020


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I think in a clear, honest voice, you relate the generational gap that today seems wider than ever. Technology and the grasp of it has really moved generations apart like continents. I am mistrustful of technology, i don't think it's good at all. You get more satisfaction the more work you put into life. I'd rather go to stores and go Christmas shopping for friends and family than just buy things on the internet. And face to face communication is much more rewarding than emails and texts. estory


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