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The times sure are changing

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Jaybird1, as always I enjoyed your poem, and how beautifully it rhymes and flows. It's a sad subject. I remember when I was little, I was doing "my thing" and didn't want to visit my grandparents too often. Now, being older, I wish I spent more time with them, asking questions and learned everything about their lives. But it's too late. I feel with you.


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Oh, every word you wrote is so true. Kids don't want to hear about the good old days as related by someone who lived them. They want to watch a cartoon about them. Excellent!


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2020


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How true. This makes me think back when I was a youth and didn't take advantage of all the opportunities to interact with my elders. Now I'm in their position and treasure the few moments I'm asked by my adult son advice on something.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2020


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Hello Jay,

What a truthful poem this is. The younger generation of today would have never survived what we went through back years ago.

I can't imagine what this world will be like fifty years from now, that is if it's still here.

Take care...Bill


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This is a very beautiful and on a certain level sad poem because it's so profound. We're up in years as well and thought a nice picture of an older person in a rocking chair would be lovely. Either way this is an excellent poem that's flows effortlessly due to unforced rhyming and a very consistent syllable count. Have a wonderful day.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2020


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I know what you mean, Bill. If my son and daughter didn't live with me I would be very lonely but now I even have my Great grandson living here. How great is that? His sister only comes around when it is time for a present. LOL They are Teens. Seventeen and nineteen. He does rap poetry. This is a great poem, Bill. You tell it all for the rest of us oldtimers. God bless you. Love your poetry. Nancy:)


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Hi Jaybird,
They might be sitting in our chairs someday, but they'll all have bad arthritis in their thumbs. They'll ache and pain, and won't know how to carry on a conversation with their neighbor.
Young people today don't know that they're missing out on a lot of wisdom. It's sad what they do to seniors today... set them in an old folks home, "independent living for seniors" they call it.
My favorite lines,
"I wish that they would come around
and lay those texting cell phones down."
and,
"They live their lives most virtually,
and that excludes old folk, like me."

It isn't that you don't have anything to offer, Jay. It's that they ignore what's beneficial.
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob


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Easy answer.
Get a cell phone.
It is still just a phone with pictures.

Tell your family to call you, or text you.
You can send them pictures they have never seen. Places they have never been.

You can be a part of their world, make them a part of yours.

Remember the "old dogs" are the ones that have the experience, and can teach the young.

Virtual communication will allow you to see them.

You can do it. You can also go places, on you phone.

Your family does not want you to be alone, they want you to be connected.

Get a phone, plug in, and "be there."

Stay well.


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This is a very creative and relatable poem. Not everything can be learned by the internet. A visit from the younger generation is always a pleasure. Thanks for sharing. God bless
August


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A very well-written heartfelt poem about the younger generation who forget their older family members who cannot keep up to date with modern technology to be lonely prisoners in their homes.


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