I want to say this is perfect, I want to give it six stars, and I would too... but I feel it was cut too short in that last stanza. I feel the rhythm was lost in that abruptness... and that was what lost that last star.
Except for this I think this is perfect in every way. The imagery, the word choice, the rhythm, the flow, the expression of the thoughts underlying it... all perfect.
"The road seemed long," at my age they all seem long. Journeys are never ending and there are dreams of happy endings somewhere down that road. We can never hurry a dream, (though at times I wish I could) they arrive and become reality, hopefully then we become content. Best regards.
Your poem reads beautifully, Jaybird. As you say in your opening, many of those who travelled the road with you are now long gone. We all get to that stage where we realise there are more people we know and love up in Heaven, and just a few down here. It's a long road, but when we get closer to the end, we realise time goes fast. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
nicely done another great formal poem from a master of formal verse. You make it seem so easy yet I know that it is hard to get it all to come together but you do and tell a tale of love lost and searching for what comes next in life well done, sir
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I am quite a fan of Robert Frost and find his work, like yours to be comforting and familiar.
Your many years of writing poetry is reflected here as the reader feels the ease of the words as they flowed from your pen.
Thank you for sharing this, and if I may say so, someone is still holding your hand!
That "promised land" within your self. There is is huge difference between that and the typical "promised and" Christians "seek." No, I mean it. Your poem is good but you are leading people astray if you are telling them the "promised land" is anywhere but within themselves.