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Down Memory Lane


Those were the days

  4 total reviews 
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Marjon van Bruggen
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Calle Romani, 14
 
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dialog only story. Nice entry for that. Good idea too, the "do you remember..." always works well. Oh, yes. This finger game...lovely illustration. And it is sadly so true, the churches are bleeding, people hardly go now, with this Covid-19 virus still frighteningly active!

One slip:
...and you had to eat (what) was put...


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for such a positive review. Also, my thanks for pointing out the missing ?what?.

reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 02-Aug-2020
    Welcome!
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January L'Angelle
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You got that right! The churches got shut down but the protesters can create all sorts of chaos. I enjoyed this dialogue only story very much. It was really well written and the picture that you used was perfect too.

One note: There is a word missing: "and you had to eat was put before you." This is missing the word "what" between eat and was.

Beautifully written! -January L. :)


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Thank you for such a boosting review and I am grateful that you picked up that missing ?what?.
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mauial
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Nice! You might want to edit this, and you had to eat was put before you. to you had to eat waht was put before you. I know that personally. ??© Can't 'til this day eat liver because of that.


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Thank you for taking the trouble to read and review my memories. Thank you, too, for pointing out that need to edit. I have taken that step.
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Jacob David Collins
 
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It is interesting to see how times have changed. I think on the whole food has become cheaper, particularly when you think of fast food places. I thought this was a well written piece and your writing flowed well. Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your thoughtful review and good luck wishes.
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