Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Status

New Here?
Sign Up
Fast! Three Questions.

Already a member?
Login

Contests

Loop Poetry Contest
Deadline: In 2 Days

My Faith
Deadline: Oct 30th

Halloween Flash Fiction
Deadline: Oct 31st

Halloween Poetry
Deadline: Oct 31st

Haiku
Deadline: Nov 2nd


Writing Classes

0 classes available. Click here locate a class and to learn more.

Rank

Poet: None
Author: None
Novel: None
Reviewer:None
Votes: None






Reviews from
Exercise!


Be careful.

  12 total reviews 
Comment by
Y. M. Roger
FantasyGirl
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  5
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  9
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  25
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  10
 

#9 Ranked Author

#5 Ranked Poet
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
LOL! Or even jump 'off' of something ... ;) :) A fun offering for the contest, Ralf -- I watch the youngsters out on the playground and just think: oh no, not these days... lol! ;) Thanx for this chuckling employment of the odd format that it is - definitely brings a smile, my lady!! ;) Yvette


 Comment Written 06-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
    Than you for taking the time to review this presentation. Glad you got that it was a bit of a joke.

    Ralf
Comment by
Spangle
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  72
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  97
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Excellent guiding advice for those whose joints are getting a bit stiff...especially those of us who love writing so much we have to force ourselves away from the computer. Not overdoing it, however, is an important key factor. Thanks for sharing this, Ralf, I'm trying to do better! :-) Best wishes in the contest!


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Thanks for your review Janet. I wouldn't try this on a bet. I'm much too old.
Comment by
Louise Michelle
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  66
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  118
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Well, the title certainly grabbed my attention because I firmly believe in working out. I do it every single day. But you're right about overdoing it. If one's body isn't used to it, a person could do more harm than good. Hugs, Lou


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Thanks for the review Michelle. Much appreciated.

    Ralf
Comment by
Melodie Michelle
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  159
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  129
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
EXCELLENT poem for the Four Line Poem Contest!
Such a true poem!
Well written and creative;-)

Thank you for sharing;-)
Many blessings to you and your family;-)


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your review Melodie I appreciate your word.

    Ralf

reply by Melodie Michelle on 04-Aug-2020
    ;-)
Comment by
January L'Angelle
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  36
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  45
Review Stars
  Rank:  146
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I suppose that this is true of anything. If you overdo anything, it can be detrimental to your health. (even exercise) I like the idea of a hop, skip and a jump. That's for me! Nicely written! God bless. Hugs! -January L. :)


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Easy does it! Yes we can overdue exercise. Thank you for the review.
Comment by
2018 Poet of the Year
Gloria ....
2014 - #365 Poet of the Year
2014 - #56 Author of the Year
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  14
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  24
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Ralf your humour shines through perfectly on this four line poem. Jumping can be a good thing to keep a little limber as you so rightly say you don't go too high and then up flying away into the next town.

A superb entry into the contest and I wish you much luck with the voters.

Gloria


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
    Thank you for realizing the humor. Not everyone did. A stellar review, thank you.

    Ralf
Comment by
Becky Kern-Taylor
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  214
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  149
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Very cute and very true. I am 80 and I can still skip rope. I have a grand daughter that gives me a test every year. That is the only jumping I do. I don't climb ladders over 4 steps either. And I will not run a marathon, period!


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Well Becky, that is something. I'm 88 and I am not about to jump anywhere. Thank you so much for your review and comments.

    Ralf
Comment by
karenina
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  97
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  98
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Love the photo which matches your poem nicely. I'm afraid if I tried that sort of exercise I'd end up in traction! Pass the Tylenol please! Brave of you to use one word as your first of four lines! I'll leave this activity to the kiddos and just settle back and enjoy your poetry instead!--Karenina


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Thanks, Karenna. I wouldn't dare try this myself. I'd end up on the floor. I'm just trying to be funny.

    Ralf

reply by karenina on 02-Aug-2020
    I was being funny too! Or trying...
    LOL

    Karenina
Comment by
Mastery
Published Author
Semper Fi
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  7
Review Stars
  Rank:  46
 

#7 Ranked Novelist
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Hi, Ralf. I think I understand this poem's meaning, but am not sure. Perhaps it's the note about your heart that throws me? You must explain this one to me, I'm afraid. LOL :) Bob


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    It's really meant to be a joke. It could be an exercise, but it's quite a dangerous way to exercise. Ergo, "be still my heart." and "don't jump to high." So I guess it's not quite clear, sorry.

reply by Mastery on 02-Aug-2020
    Probably me, Ralf. I can be thick sometimes. :) Bob

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    But so sweet!

reply by Mastery on 02-Aug-2020
    X Bob
Comment by
2016 and 2018 Script Write Of The Year
judiverse
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  26
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  5
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
  Rank:  1
Review Stars
  Rank:  35
 

#5 Ranked Author

#1 Ranked Script Writer!
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
This is good advice, presented in a humorous way. That last line is great. Some people overdo the exercise and suffer the consequences. You might want to think of using a verb instead "a" as your first word. Did you mean "hop" in the second line? Your last line has nine syllables instead of eight. Just use the contraction "don't" and that'll take care of it. Look at those points and you'll have a great entry. Best of luck. judi


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Judi I changed to A to The. The details of the poem say 9 syllables.
    Thanks for your review. What verb could I use?

    Ralf

reply by judiverse on 02-Aug-2020
    You're welcome. You are correct about the 9 syllables. I must have misread. The isn't much of a change from a. Try a verb like "Move" to capture the spirit of what you're saying. See what you come up with. judi
  -1-  2  Next Page 


Market your book.
Advertising options.
A Vampire's Proposal
Love transcends death


Share or Bookmark
  Contact Us | En español | Advertise With Us

© 2015 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy