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Cops turn up at the door

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I can only imagine the wide range of things that the police experience when going door to door. Is door to door a thing in Australia? It isn't here in the USA. I laughed when I read "Colby Virus" And ... I wish the President was Mr. Lincoln! sigh


 Comment Written 13-Aug-2020



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    All people in lock down are facing a 4,000 fine if not found isolating.Thanks for reading Margaret. We are super strict in Queensland (Aust) that is why we have NO cases.

reply by Margaret Bednar on 13-Aug-2020
    People that are in lockdown because they have been exposed or have tested positive. Not everyone. Got it.
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It can be humorous sometimes when people are hard of hearing. This is funny that the lady thinks the president is Lincoln. You have written a unique little dialog.


 Comment Written 07-Aug-2020



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    Hello Elaine, Thanks for reading. I think we all need a laugh these days. Blessings, Kay xx
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Hi Kace, I think I know that woman...that would
be my mom...exactly how she would answer the door....
very funny you...


love your poem sweetie pie...and love your picture...very well thought of my wonderful sweet friend...and very well written...take care...and be well...love much you...Linda xxoo


 Comment Written 07-Aug-2020



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    G'day Mate, I wanted folks to smile, and many have reviewed this with a grin. Thanks again Wombat K xx

reply by l.raven on 08-Aug-2020
    always welcome sweetie pie....love xxoo
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Haaaaaa, this is hilarious K. I really got a charge out of the "cognitive test" and yes who is the president is on that test.

Of course Madam is not deaf she just has selective hearing. lol

Excellent entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the Committee.

Gloria


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    G'day mate! There's life in the old girl yet! I am glad you got a laugh my friend. We need to laugh these days. Love, K.
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This is so funny!! Poor lady doesn't know who the President is.she would have to be Iberia a hundred years over wow.she was a little hard of hearing.


 Comment Written 06-Aug-2020



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    Hi Barbara, Glad you got a laugh. Thanks for reading my friend. Love, Kay.

reply by country ranch writer on 07-Aug-2020
    Smiles'
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This was great Kace. It definitely followed the necessary criteria of the contest. Which, by the way, good luck in. I really had to chuckle as I read this, most elderly people become both deaf and forgetful and you managed to capture both in this dialogue. I really do feel for the men in blue that have to do these check. Well done.


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    G'day my friend. Glad you enjoyed and thanks for reading. Bless you, Kay xx
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Haha, the dialogue is funny on a serious issue. Your lines of dialogue read well. I could hear this conversation as I read it. Your notes are informative. Yes, we should check on our neighbors-esp. the elderly and alone. Door to door checking isn't being done that I have heard of. I like your last line. That should tell 'em. I know it's done in fun.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan


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    G'day mate! I like to think you got a laugh. Yes, it's serious and yes the army is checking on people that are supposed to be isolating at home and surprisingly are not! Thank you my friend. K xx
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It is a plausible story and yes it is funny. They picked a lulu this time. The thought that this may happen in the future, is rather scary. Good entry for the contest. Good Luck

Ralf


 Comment Written 06-Aug-2020



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    Hi Raff, It is happening here now! The Army are going door to door to check that people are self-isolating, many are not found to be home! Thank you my friend K xx

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    Really, where are you?

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    Australia!

reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 06-Aug-2020
    I figured from you pen name, but I don't like to assume. Thanks
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LOL!! Oh, you just know they encounter all types when they're on patrol, yeah?! ;) Such a fun offering for the contest, my lady - best of luck to you! ;) :)


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    G'day Y. M. The Army are doing the rounds to make sure people are self-isolating, many are not! Thanks for reading my friend. Blessings, K xx
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That is just how a hard of hearing person would react, I know, I do it all the time when I don't have my hearing aids in. This is a really excellent contest entry, Kay. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra

Hope you're keeping well, my friend. xxx


 Comment Written 06-Aug-2020



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    G'day mate! Yes, we have the Army going around checking on people that are supposed to be self-isolating and a lot are not. Puts the rest of us at risk. I'm fine and I hope you are too? Much love, Kay xx
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