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Sammy and Johnny


A tale from the golden age of Bronzeville

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Liz O'Neill
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This was an extremely difficult assignment. Just to understand what a poem with rhythmn would sound like, especially if it does not necessarily have a rhyming pattern. The alliteration enhances the motion. The reader is drawn in to the sensory experience of the setting action and characters. Well done.


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
    Thanks - I find that, with more complex meters, it often exists in m mind differently than it comes across on the page - that's especially true, as you point out, when there is no rhyme to reinforce the meter.
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The taletelling is simple and reliable; I have enjoyed the free flow of thoughts, and rhythms in thoughts expositions and a few uses of alliterations, well said, well done, thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 13-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
    Thanks - these more complex rhythm poems are hard for me as I find that the rhythm that exists in my head, doesn't always come accross on paper.
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I like this write and think it is reminiscent of ballads and could be put to music. I could almost feel the summer heat and the build up of emotion toward the end. I liked the surprise killer as well.


 Comment Written 11-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Thanks - I was thinking of songs like "Frankie and Johnny" and "Stagger Lee" when I wrote it - nice to know that came through.
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