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A foal is born.

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This poem reminds us of the miracle of birth and the love and hope it brings. I like the metaphor of bloat for pregnancy (only after I looked up bloat in horses on the internet). Maybe you should put definitions of bloat and caul in your notes.
Keep writing and stay healthy
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 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
    Thank you for reading my friend, glad you enjoyed. Blessings, K.

reply by dragonpoet on 15-Sep-2020
    You're welcome, K.
    Have a great day.
    Joan
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Congrats on your prize--this is lovely--unusual theme--graphic description of birth--I mean that as a compliment! Glad I caught up to this one. Cheers. LIZ


 Comment Written 07-Sep-2020



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    Hi Liz, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Cheers, K xx
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What a lovely poem ro announce the birth of a new foal in your paddock, I'm presuming, and what a wonderful experience to share. I loved the ending..new birth, new life, forever dawn..lovely, cheers Valda


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
    Hello Valda, Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed. Horses are in my blood! Love, Kay.
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Aww, this poem is precious and heartwarming -- the birth of a foal. Did you actually witness the birth? Well, the readers did via your well-written imagery.

As an animal lover, I appreciate this poem immensely.

Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
    Hello friend, thank you for reading and enjoying. No, didn't witness the birth as the poem is fiction. However, I owned eight horses at one stage and have seen much. Blessings, Kay.
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As an equestrian and horse lover, your poem caught my attention. Nice writing about such an incredibly magical event. The birth of a new foal is truly spellbinding for me!


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
    Hello fellow-horse lover, Thank you for reading and glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Kay.
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Hi Kace, it's amazing how a mother instinct will naturally come into play when they have new born babies...human...and animals...I watch the gorillas with their new born...and they are sooooo strong...yet their touch is so gentle to their young...it's amazing sweet girl...and all are so protective of them...I've loved horses my whole life...could never get enough of them...I love your poem my sweet friend...and your picture is priceless...fouls are so beautiful...very well written...so sorry I am out of sixes...love you Linda xxoo


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
    Hello Linda Louie, Thanks so much for your kind review. Yes, horses are in our blood. Once you gain their trust, they are loyal and loving. Love to you my sweet friend. Kace xx

reply by l.raven on 15-Aug-2020
    your sooooo welcome sweetie pie...I always wished I had one...sigh...love you...xxoo
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I can always count on your for a horse poem. I am always delighted to come across one and this is a gem. I love your last verse about God's love and the foal is a reflection of His love. Excellent poem to be read again and again.


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
    Hello my friend, Thanks so much for your kind review. I wanted to pop in a spiritual piece in the ending. Hope all is well with you? Love, Kay xx
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Beautiful story you've told in this poem, Kay, about discovering that your mare had given birth to her foal. So tender, the interaction between you and the mare, as she follows her maternal instincts, licking clean her brand new babe, freshly brought forth from her body.

The correct spelling is "caul," in stanzas 2 and 3.

I love your last line, "New birth, new life, forever dawn." And the photo is so joyful!


 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
    I thought I had it spelt incorrectly! Thanks. And thank you for your lovely review. I hope you are both keeping well Mrs Pizza. Love, K xx

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 15-Aug-2020
    You're very welcome, my friend. We're both managing as best we can, which is often a real challenge! Yet we must always count our blessings.
    I sure would love a few nice slices of pizza! It's not as easy to get it, as it was before the pandemic. Some places have closed down, and others are only takeout or delivery. No eat-in restaurants, at all. We don't know how long this will continue -- maybe well unt6

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 15-Aug-2020
    As I was saying before the software bounced me out, we may not be able to eat in restaurants until well into 2021. Mmm. Pizza. I love it.
    I hope you're keeping well also! May God bless you and surround you with His mercy and grace. Love, Mary Kay xoxo

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
    We are allowed to eat out (with rules) we have no active cases in Queensland thanks to the vigilance of our Premier. Thinking of you my dear friend. Love, Kay xx

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    We are allowed to eat out (with rules) we have no active cases in Queensland thanks to the vigilance of our Premier. Thinking of you my dear friend. Love, Kay xx

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 15-Aug-2020
    It's so nice that you can eat out in restaurants in Queensland, and especially wonderful that you have no active cases there. Thanks for your lovely thoughts. Hugs, Mary Kay xoxo
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What a gorgeous photograph to go along with your most eloquent and finely written poem. I do love horses, and you have done a wonderful job with this piece.

Many thanks for sharing your thoughts and observations today, K. :))

Gloria


 Comment Written 14-Aug-2020



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    Good Morning my friend, Thanks so much for your in-depth review. Aussies have two loves, the sea and horses. I started riding at five years old. After my accident, I began a Riding for the Disabled branch. I had a riding school that wasn't doing well, decided to donate the horses to start the new branch for the children. Love, K.
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How blessed you would be to have observed the birth as in your lovely and articulate poem. Such wonders are cherished moments in our lives. Well done with the chosen art as well.

Ralf


 Comment Written 14-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
    Hi Ralf, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Kay. xx
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