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Yesterday Is Gone


You are always in my heart

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Miss Cookie Atkinson
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Can tell by the way you express your feeling that you truly loved your wife,
and I'm sue she felt the same way.
One day you two will be together again
Cookie


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2020


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Hello Jay,

Another very beautiful tribute to your wife. I'm sure she smiled when she read it in Heaven.

We all will reunite with our loved ones who's gone on ahead, so she will be waiting for you at Heaven's Gate with her arms wide open.

Take care Jay...Bill


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020


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first and foremost, I'm sorry about your wife.
i am new to fanstory, for the purpose of the book that I wrote and would like feedback on. but, nevermind that, my point is that i'm new, and i see that you are a veteran poet, so it seems perhaps awkward for me to try and give advice, but it is the part of the poem that gave it lackluster for me... that is: the word "dwell" may not be the right word you are searching for. for rhyme, of course it is... but for meaning, it does not fit to what I assume you are trying to depict. "...that we would never depart. Together we would always dwell." ...When people say that they "dwell on their past," they speak, think, or write at length about their unhappiness, anxiety, or dissatisfaction. ...and so, I don't think that's what you meant. With that said, I'm routing for you. The poem, in fact spoke a volume or two, ever so eloquently... as sad as it made me feel. It evoked emotion, and you did a beautiful job of letting me in. For instance, I was thinking "magical" before you even mentioned the words "magic spell."

Best of Luck

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 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020


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What a beautiful thought, jay. That we may join the ones we hold so dear in our hearts is indeed something to look forward to when our days on earth are finished. Bless you. I can only say, I wish you the best in your grieving. :) Bob


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I find very strong views, compelling thoughts projecting interests to be considered, explosive thinking by a gifted writer. I have no direct suggestion but think enhancing this might aid: I saw in you your. Maybe a little more. All in my given opinion.


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Beautiful piece with good flow. The loss of a soul mate usually leaves one feeling empty. The memories never end. "My life remains in yesterday" made a very big impression on me. May the Lord continue to strengthen you and grant you the needed peace to live through this period. Thanks for sharing your heart-felt thoughts.


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This is a romantic well written lamentation in a sonnet to your wife who passed away. It shows a long love and shows your faith that you will meet again.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan


 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020


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I'm so sorry for your loss of your wife. I hadn't realized that. A beautiful tribute to her. Your words of tenderness shows through and your love shows. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing!
Patty


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I absolutely loved this! It made me feel.. something. I can't describe what it was. It moved something in me. Even made me cry a little. Thank you for sharing this with us.


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020


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Hello jaybird1, your poem is filled with loving memories.

I especially liked:
I saw in you your soul and heart,
under the starlit magic spell
and knew we never would depart.
Together we would always dwell

Silky rhyming. A poem of love. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer


 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020


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