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A project of reclamation.

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A very interesting story. We learn a bit of the Indian background from this. Definitely it is not easier to rebuild a culture. Sometimes, once it is gone, it is lost forever. For example, just opening door for others is slowly gone.

You are good at discussing this issue. Keep up the good work.



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A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review.


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Now, I guess I'll have to find time to go back and read your other two stories in your Disappearance Trilogy to catch up. Great job. Thanks for sharing. I wish I had a six.


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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Ric. All three stories are stand-alone, so, no need to go back and read the other two. There will not be a quiz. Thanks again. Peace, Lee

reply by Ric Myworld on 06-Sep-2020
    LOL! Thanks Lee, I would probably flunk the quiz anyway.
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I really like this. It scrambles my brain which I imagine one of the goals so the reader will be in the bizarre mindset of Lone Eagle. I love how every question ultimately comes to be a hypothetical. There's tongue-in-cheek humor laced with ironies and juxtapositions. I see some alliteration woven through this also. The setting and allusion will definitely draw the reader in. I love the hopeful tone of taking back the land and rebuilding the culture. I especially like this as other worldly as it is, because it parallels many of the issues I address in my story called Traffic in which the abducted, rescued teens of the Crow nation tell of the injustices done to them and we see the dire poverty they live with daily. I am voting for this one. It is excellent and I am giving it A+.


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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
    Thanks so much, Liz. Yes, I figured it was about time the Indians came out the winners. If North America is to have a new beginning, let's give the Indians a chance to do it their way. Thank for the grand review. Peace, Lee
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This is a great story. The combination of old and new is flawless in the flow of the story. The descriptions and charecters kept me interested to the end.


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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
    Thanks so much, eliz100. Yes, the past informs our present--even in these crazy times. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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I'm all out of sixes, Lee, but this is even more than a six. I really enjoyed this, the disappearance of everyone, except three Indians. They need the chiefs to send some women if they want to repopulate the world with Apaches. What a fantastic idea. Well done, your writing is always superb. :)) Sandra xx


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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
    Thanks so much, Sandra. Oh, I have a feeling a few Apache women may be waiting around the next bend, or over the next rise. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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This story is a pleasure to read. The tone, the voice, the references to history and modern culture, the dialogue, the theme, and so much more work together seamlessly.

I will bookcase every thing you write and study it.

On another topic, I have entered a poem, "Lesson," in the free verse contest. Please review it. Jeff


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
    Thanks for this terrific review, Jeff. I've been unavailable for a few days, I'll look up your poem this afternoon. Thank you again. Peace, Lee
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This is my first intro to your "stand-alone" series. You really have a creative mind - I like the sly humor woven throughout and I really was curious as to what would happen next - three little Indians - ha - yes, they do need a woman but let's hope it is "women". Well penned!


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
    Thank you, Margaret. Yes, I believe they'll run into a few Apache women . . . maybe over the very next rise. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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I just let out a in enormous deep sigh of reader satisfaction, hw. Everything about this story is written with perfection from the first sentence to the last. Your inspiration and imagination remains an ability and gift to truly envy. I adored
Lone Last Guy and the introduction of Charlie and Wilber and feel they were brought into the story at the perfect time. Your clever use of words and phrases, mixed into the tale, made me smile, laugh, and hold this story closer ... rakish beret, mediocre SAT scores, zipper lobby, did you ty he casino, etc are out of place in his world and makes it very funny. Of course I loved his practice jiggles without his BVDs and feeling like a true savage. Outstanding in every way, hw. A story easily never forgotten. And I just know some Apache women will soon join the first guys to build a new land.
Indy

Why not list the other two stories in your trilogy to lure some more reads?


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Ah, thanks so much, Indy. It's so hard to find readers for these longer pieces. Don't these people know I'm a brilliant writer? Don't answer that.
    I have every confidence there are Apache women waiting just over the next rise.
    I posted 'Cain't Eat 'Em', the second story in the trilogy last year, but I can't remember the title of the the first story! I think I posted it in 2010, or 2011. Can you imagine?

    Well, thank you so much for everything, Indy. Peace, Lee
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Like all of your stories, this one has some great lines - cell phones being "as moot as they were mute" and (my personal favorite) "he couldn't quite handle the genital free fall".

This one though, also seems to run a little deeper than many of yours. While it's certainly not "all concept and no cohesion", there certainly seems to be a concept or two in there - like "Who are you when you strip everything away?", and the more macro "What would America be if it hadn't been for European colonization?"

I like that Lone Eagle, having changed his name is journeying back home and picking up kindred spirits along the way. As he does this, it becomes clearer what's real and what's not (Walmarts. IHOPs, etc.). In that sense, this is a rare post-apocalyptic piece in that it leaves the reader about what is coming next and not about what existed before "The Great Disappearing Act"

The themes and questions seem to rise up gently and organically from your narrative - the reader isn't hit over the head with them.

For my Monopoly money, it's one of the best things you've written - and you've written a lot of really great stuff.


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2020



reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
    Thanks so much for the great review, Mark. Yes, I've got a thing about 'starting over'. It always starts with one person, then grows. Sometimes for the good, sometimes, not. I'm really glad you enjoyed this particular piece. Peace, Lee
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