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How I met my Soulmate


A lifetime together sometimes starts small.

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Pearl Edwards
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I got your name from Roy, and he suggested I read your story, as I have recently lost my soul mate, and I'm glad he did. I enjoyed reading your story of how you met your soulmate,
cheers.


 Comment Written 09-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
    Thank you Pearl, I'm glad ;you decided to read this. We had a lot of wonderful memories. We were together for sixty-one years. He died three years ago. I still feel like if good but I'll always miss him.
    Beth
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I enjoyed reading your very sweet and romantic story about how you met your future husband. I loved the part where you left the movie theater, strutting along with a newfound confidence. I can relate to the shyness as I'm quite shy a lot of times. I found certain parts humorous and cute. It sounds like he was a very determined suitor who got the lady he wanted.


 Comment Written 03-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I appreciate your input.
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This is a well told and interesting story. You have written well and kept my interest throughout. It sounds like the beginnings of a sweet love story.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the review. You never know what little thing might change your life forever. This was the beginning of a love story that lasted 61 years until my husband passed away in 2017.

reply by equestrik on 03-Sep-2020
    Wow-truly beautiful!
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Mary Vigasin
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like your story and as a late bloomer, I could relate to your story. It is a good one. However, what I believe would enhance your story is
not use "I" so much. Rather than "I could tell he was shy." something like: "he seemed shy as he stared down into his coffee. so it must have taken him courage to later approach my aunt to ask about me."
got rid of two "I's
"plying?"
Look at how many times you use "I" and see if you can reword some.
Otherwise I see a good effort.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. I usually avoid using "I" a lot in my stories. This one was to be told from my prospective and so this is the way which seemed most natural.
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Wow, what a beautiful story with the right ingredients: shyness innocence, true friendship, and let's not forget the old fashion way: the hand-written letters. And all it's well when ends well:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and lovely comments.
    I love ;your remarks.
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Sandra du Plessis
 
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A very well-written sentimental story about you and your soulmate met and how it lead to a lifelong marriage together. That is like a Fairy tale that ends well and continue into the future.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the great review and comments. I appreciate your reading it.
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Wow what a lovely romantic beginning to true love told with sincerity and candour - we never can tell where Cupid's arrow will strike - a most enjoyable read


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you found it enjoyable.
    :)
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Nicely written story of Sentimental Reflection. Your descriptive passages showing your transition from shy young girl to confident young lady were well achieved and provided for a lovely ending. Little notes - 1st paragraph, line 2, change "a" to "an." Also, paragraph 6, should be
"an eight-page..." Again, great story and good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thank so much for a great review and comments. Thanks for pointing out the spags.
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This is too cute. Wow, one movie turned you around? I liked your description of his hand writing, and yet it didn't bother you. They days of letter writing is gone. And how different for your Aunt to give away your personal info such as an address. Creeps today, you just can't do that. Just this morning I was hesitant to give a Pastor info on what state I lived in. LOL. Great job.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thank for the review. Yes you are so right. It was a different time. My husband and I were together 61 years until is death. This took place in the 50's.
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This is a perfect love story. It flows well and is easy to read. I like the way the meeting took place and how you got some self-esteem in place. There are a few grammatical errors that need to be addressed in the story but otherwise is a good read.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thanks for the review. I appreciate you reading it. I read back over it and five missing words. I hope those were the only errors your referred to.
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