Take Your Burdens to Jesus
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This is a beautiful set of lyrics, Tina - genuinely prayerful. I feel for your hurting soul. I had a second mother too, because my Mum died when I was a teen also, so I know how you feel. I'm praying for comfort for you.

Correction:
Change full stop to comma in this line between 'mine' and 'yes':
For You are mine.yes, mine; You are mine.


 Comment Written 04-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
    I'm sorry you had to go through that. Did you ever have a step-mom or someone who kind of mothered you?
    I can see that correction makes sense. I will fix it. Thank you Lisa:) I'm dreading the funeral tomorrow, but yet it's a part of letting her go to Jesus. Thanks sweet friend. Your message means a lot.
    Tina

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
    I'm sorry you had to go through that. Did you ever have a step-mom or someone who kind of mothered you?
    I can see that correction makes sense. I will fix it. Thank you Lisa:) I'm dreading the funeral tomorrow, but yet it's a part of letting her go to Jesus. Thanks sweet friend. Your message means a lot.
    Tina

reply by LisaMay on 04-Sep-2020
    No I didn't have a step mom. My father never re-partnered. I belonged to a sports team and the coach was kind to me, plus my school friends' mothers were great.
    I hope the funeral is not too difficult for you. xx

reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
    I am only as strong as I let God be.
    I will be okay...just we've had 6 people die in just a little over a year. It just is tiring. No worries. Gods plan is best. I will focus my eyes on my Savious and be grateful He will never leave me!
    I appreciate you:)
    TTina
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Tina:
This is a very lovely poem, beseeching from God his help and mercy. In the 3rd stanza, correct nail-scarred --you have an m there.
I love your photo and your excellent song.
Best wishes for all your writing.
Cindy


 Comment Written 03-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
    Cindy,
    Thank you for pointing that out! I will fix it.
    Yes, I do beseech Him. Love that word you used!
    Have a nice day:)
    Tina

reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
    Cindy,
    Thank you for pointing that out! I will fix it.
    Yes, I do beseech Him. Love that word you used!
    Have a nice day:)
    Tina
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Tina, this is a lovely song of praise. I am sure our Lord hears your melody. It stirred me and I hope you'll forgive me. I felt my spirit sing and I changed your third stanza and added one more.
Forgive me...it is your song/prayer.

I can see your hands, loving mail-scarred hands.
You're the reason I don't have to die.
You forgave our sins as your blood touched sand
That's when thunder shook the earth and sky.

You died on the cross, took the place of me
and I did not know what to do.
Yet, with your love, you have made me see
all that you when through, and I love you.

I'm sorry about your second mom. I have one too.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    I dont take offense at all because the words poured out pretty fast one day lol. I like your changes! Thunder shook the earth and sky.

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    I dont take offense at all because the words poured out pretty fast one day lol. I like your changes! Thunder shook the earth and sky.
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Thank you for sharing this beautiful song, Tina! Praying for you and for your "second mom" - I know that His arms are around you and comforting you and Daddy Dillard.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    You're the sweetest, Helen. Getting ready to go see Daddy Dillard. They live an hour away. I do feel the Lords protection. I know He will give me right words to say and right things to do:)
    He wants donuts, a comfort food I guess. We are taking him a dozen. Why does everything beg a poem,lol...Daddy Dillard and a Dozen Doughnuts...
    I so appreciate you!
    Thanks for this note!
    Tina
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Tina, I appreciated reading this piece. It is thoughtful.
There just is a tiny typo, if I may. In the second to last line, the punctuation before the word - yes - should be a comma. Thank you for sharing this lyrical poem. It offers reassurance and reminds of faith. Blessings. ~DD


 Comment Written 01-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
    Thanks for telling me about the typo. I will go fix it. I appreciate it. Thank for reading!
    Tina
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