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Just Puffing Away


A little comedy, mixed with fear

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Hi Jaybird, old and wise young man. What you write here is very nice, thoughtful, and oh, it carries lots of truth. I believe we much live well till the last of our days, if one cigarette does it, then more power to that puff, one at a time.


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Amazing! This is beautiful and funny! For a final act of defiance, you really held nothing back. I absolutely love the final line and any reference to Bill Clinton (particularly, references to definitions of "is").


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What a hoot, Jay Bird!
I say, "Go for it!" and "Do what you love to do!" To heck with your doctor!
But the clincher for this well-executed poem, is your last line! Choked on that one!

Thank you for brightening my day!
diane


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As a young man, I get a charge talking to older guys. The smell of good pipe tobacco is a delight! If it hasn't hurt this far, why bother enjoying life less in the golden hours of sunset. Very nice.


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I'm not quite your age, 66 myself, enjoying as you my smoke that relaxes me to endure my day. Its not so much doctors as family members who persist to warn me of its threat. As you I say, at this age what the hell. I loved the way you finished this work: I don't inhale. Super capture of this issue in my stated opinion.


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Hello Jaybird1,
Nice piece of poetry having smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and, beautifully depicting its theme laced with comic flavor.
2nd stanza is particularly noteworthy.


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Hi Jay,
thank you for sharing this great poem in support of smokers likeme and you, I to do not inhale and thought it was just me, started at school for show and have continued these years to take in but then puff straight out. Cheers Colin


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Jaybird1, as our friend George Burns asked, if you knew you would have lived this long, would you have taken better care of yourself? I know there's got to be something in tobacco that causes longevity in some folks!
Keep puffing, but not inhaling, all you want, Jaybird1!
Thank you for writing, "Just Puffing Away."


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love the snarky sense of humor that pervades the poem and I can relate. My wife keeps trying to get me to give up on coffee but I say never since I love my coffee but now a days I drink half decaf half real coffee and only in the morning otherwise I am wired until 4 am and since I get up at first light that means I won't get much sleep


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Well, you've outlasted all of those four fine gentlemen you cite as models!

I enjoyed your humorous take on this and I hope you tell your doctor that you're at an age where the simple enjoyment of a pipe is hardly going to make much difference to your longevity.

Referring to other famous pipe smokers livened this up. Of course, Sherlock Holmes and Popeye were other well-known habitues!

Steve


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