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Viewing comments for Chapter 82 "St. Louis Chapter 35 part 2"

Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?

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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello Barb,
The closure to your novel St. Louis Chapter 35 part 2.
Smiles now knowing that Logan finally express his love for
McKenzie 'Mac', makes your story with anticipation if Logan does return from his trip.
Gert


 Comment Written 13-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    That's why Logan was so hesitant. He was worried about what would happen if he did not return. He finally gave in to his love.

reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Sep-2020

    Barb,
    Will we ever find if Logan does return? Gert

reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Not really, but I am sure he will.

reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Sep-2020
    We all know it's up to author of this excellent novel.
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F I n a l l y, they are getting married. Nice and sweet chapter with double tears of joy for the marriage and of sadness for the departure. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.


 Comment Written 10-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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Wow, great chapter! A fitting ending. While I did not read the majority of the previous chapters, I do not doubt that it was equally fantastic. I noticed two typos: towards the beginning, their eyes "met" should be "meet" and this time your guts wrong, should be "gut's." Minor omissions and I know you have been busy! Great work.


 Comment Written 10-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review. I will correct those areas. The first one should be met, because I write in the past tense. I fixed the second one.
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You've penned the traditional love scene here, complete with that moment when the girl wins over the guy about to leave her. The dialogue is perfectly in that genre, everyone says what they are supposed to. It really seems almost like a Hallmark movie to me. I wonder what they would think of it. Send it in to them and see what they say. estory


 Comment Written 10-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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This is well written and poignant. The illustration is perfect and sets the stage for your words. I will be looking forward to future chapters. Nicely done.


 Comment Written 09-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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Awe, this is a sweet and looked forward to ending of your story. This is nicely written and I love the eventual sweet ending. I was a bit concerned about them ever really coming together for real.


 Comment Written 09-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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Barbara, I feel so bad. I didn't think you were posting this week, and now I don't have a six to give you for your last chapter. Can you forgive me? Please.
So Logan changed his mind at the very last and it was a happy ending after all. I loved the story, and I'm looking forward to your next one. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 09-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review. I am not worried about the six.

reply by Ulla on 12-Sep-2020
    Oh, but I am.it so deserved one, but I truly didn't believe you would post so Ii gave them all away. I wish we had more to give. :)))
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This has been the most endearing and intriguing story I have ever read! I sincerely hope you make lots of money on the book. Very well done!


 Comment Written 08-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 12-Sep-2020
    You're quite welcome.
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Barbara,

NICE! I knew you couldn't really keep these two apart. Not even the writer had the power~! hahaha

Notes:
1.) She nodded toward three people standing off to the right side.
--> can you make it much clearer, much sooner, who these folks are?

2.) but this time either (your) guts wrong or you're not listening to it."

3.) When I told you my idea of a prefect husband, you met every criteria and more.
--> I REALLY don't think she wants a 'PRE-FECT' husband. Yuck.

4.) "Not going to happen."
--> could be read to sound like she's agreeing with him - but I know better!

I enjoyed this whole series of chapters and events - and getting to know these two lovers and all the folks in their circles. You handled their romance with just the right touch of give and take and set them up just right for a love match. Kudos!

I enjoyed and congratulate you! The six is for the book's entirety. Good luck!



 Comment Written 08-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    I have made the corrections and coming from you it's extra special. Thank you.
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Logan swallowed hard. "I see that." He walked over to her, and they kissed. "You never did listen very well."
"I listened. I just disagreed." She kissed him.
(I liked this part of the conversation! Well done!)

Enjoyed!


 Comment Written 08-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
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