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Hum A Happy Tune


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Hi Jay,
I enjoyed your poem, "Hum A Happy Tune". It reminded me of that song by Bobby McFerrin, "Don't Worry, Be Happy". Lots of whistling in it, too.
https://youtu.be/d-diB65scQU
I can't whistle now either. I have a partial plate, and it just doesn't work for whistling. But you solved that problem... you hum instead. Where there's a will, there's a way. I play guitar... that's my way.
I have just one suggestion.
"But then, with age my teeth were lost
and broken spirits were the cost." I suggest,
(But then, with age my teeth were lost,
For bubble gum and candy cost.)

Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob



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My friend, you poetry resonates, because you reflect upon the reality of life; as always uplifting in simple down to earth vocabulary, framed into lovely, meaningful verses; thank you for the delightful treat.


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Interesting poem. I too have problems with dentures. I like your idea of changing singing to whistling instead. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda


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Bravo! Very nice cadence, very nice flow, and an even better message. This certainly did life my spirits. The positivity and determination to stay happy prevails here. Thank you for sharing!


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I've read another on of your posts and was equally as thrilled by it. Your a great writer and this is a beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing!
A.Fortier


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This was beautiful my grandfather hum all the time and i truly enjoyed this piece.
very well done
it was a pleasure to read your work
thank you for sharing
with your well penned poem truly outstanding!!!


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I enjoy your poems so much and that is mostly because they are happy and positive and really just make me feel good when I read them. It is definitely hard to feel bad when whistling or humming. :)


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You poetry makes me hum a tune. I like the way
you make it rhyme and that seems more like when
I went to school poetry. You are a natural at telling
a story in poetry.


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Jay,

What fun! I've tried all my life to learn how to whistle. But to no avail. I love the optimistic style of this poem - even if bad things happen we can make them into positives with the right attitude. Thanks so much!


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Great poem. I love the up-beat tone and the language is good. There is good rhyme here, with a somehow fitting, very direct presentation and large font. I like that so I can read it easier. My new glasses aren't her yet! Great work.


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