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Merry go Round


The days when going in circles was more fun

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This cinquain, Merry-go-round, has the right set up and brings the reader back to the fun of that up and down and round and round of the carnival ride. Neat.


 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
    Bill, thanks.
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equestrik
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I enjoyed this write. I think because of the horses and the tameness of the merry-go-round, it was always my favorite ride t fairs. I have never seen a double decker one-it is magical!


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Thank you have a n awesome Sunday!
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Dear JLR,
Thank you for sharing this well-written poem. The picture is stunning and compliments your work well. Congrats on the good work!
-A.Foriter


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    I smile back, have a delightful Sunday!
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A superb cinquain, J. Your reference to reaching for the top of excellent by grabbing the brass ring is well referenced with your adept and subtle use of metaphor.

Certainly the endeavour to reach to top can be like a merry-go-round amply illustrated here.

A superb entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the Committee.

Gloria


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Gloria, you are such a super supporter, so very validating! I am very grateful,
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very nice ride and a cinquain
very well done I hope the best in the contest
it was a pleasure to read your work
thank you for sharing
the artwork went real well with your well penned poem


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Smiling back with gratitude, enjoy your Sunday!
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JLR,

Sounds a lot like our lives right now. Spinning and spinning - almost upside down, really. Things have changed so quickly in the matter of only a few short months!

Makes you look at things a bit differently. Life is fragile - hold to the brass ring while you can and soak up every moment of pleasure. The fair eventually leaves and the lights go dark.

Thanks!


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Robyn, yes it is much more difficult to chase the brass rings when all you seemingly care about is just survival.
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I love a ride on the Merry-go-round when it was fun to around in circles.
Your poem is an excellent metaphor for our times and I think I want this ride to stop.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Janet, dear friend, yes! It is much more difficult to chase the brass rings when all you seemingly care about is just survival.
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karenina
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What a metaphorical gem! That's all we can do, really, as we ride this ride of life... Hold on and hope, in the end, it was all worth it. Maybe that brass ring gets us into heaven!--Karenina


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Karenina, Yes! It is much more difficult to chase the brass rings when all you seemingly care about is just survival.

reply by karenina on 13-Sep-2020
    Agreed! So pertinent to today's predicament... Hard to enjoy the ride when masked and socially distanced and mourning the loss of far too many from a pandemic we do NOT Have a grip on!--Karenina
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Oh, this was beautiful. The visuals were amazing. I felt like I was there, on that merry-go-round holding to the brass ring for the dear life! (lol). Great creative imagery and artistic presentation with that photo.

A very merry Cinquain which should do well in the contest, good luck in the booths!


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Eternal Muse, Thank you so much for the good wishes.
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Nicely done. I loved the merry go round when I was young still would if I wasn't incapacitated with bad knees. You paired it with a delightful picture. Best of luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Boogienights, Thank you! Enjoy your Sunday to its fullest!
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