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Marching in unison

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I enjoyed your Army marching poem. My husband and son are retired military and the cadences were all important. I heard them yesterday when I was on Ft. Lee... brings back a lot of memories. Great job and thanks for sharing your reminiscences with us, Jay.

Melissa



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Long before rap was created, this talking rhythm poetry set a pace and served a purpose... My dad, a vet of WW11, recited them years after. They intertained me during my childhood.


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Hi Jay,
I enjoyed this marching poem. It had rhythm, and I could picture soldiers singing it as they walked toward their next battle. Written in 1944, so you were a soldier poet back then?
I've never heard that before though, "in cadence count"... what's it mean?
We think this virus is giving us difficult times, but those war years were a lot worse.
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob


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Hello Jaybird, a really good poem - again! Written in 1944 - were you in the military then. The poem has a good 'marching' beat. 'I had a gal from Kalamazoo.' - there's a song there LOL. Another great piece from you. Warm regards Dorothy x


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This definitely is reminiscent of marching chants. I think you did a good job of making every stanza different and yet unified in the style overall. This poem reminds the reader that enlisted people would rather be 'parked' at home, too.


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I don't why, but I love these chants. It also must help you keep in line with a drumming cadance as part of the March. Thanks so much for sharing, much enjoyed.


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I think it's awesome that you remember some of the light hearted things while you were training up for the war. So, this was written in 1944? You were a terrific poet then as you are now, and I'm privileged to be able to read something written at a time when all may have seemed a bit dark. Well said my friend!


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You certainly captured that sense of the marching rhythm in this poem. But what comes through the simple sing along songs is this sense of homesickness, of these images of home and the girls back there, haunting your steps in the drill. estory


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This uses the repetition of the marching song to tell the story. They show these songs in a lot of the war movies I have seen regardles of the branch of service.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan


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I guess that is a good way to stay in unison. I have heard many of these song sung by marching men. Would be fun to learn now they come up with the words. =] Well done as always sir.


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