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Straight and Narrow Path


Steps taken not always straight and narrow

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This is one of the most interesting pieces that I have read yet. I loved it and it is so to the point with its message. It is a good post for this contest and the picture is great. A very interesting path and one that is certainly not straight. Good job on this post and good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Annie, Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this poem.
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Hello JLR,
What a unique photo of the ancient burial place? This is a beautifully well written poem about staying on the straight and narrow path. Something we all soon do is to find that path of the straight and narrow. We sometimes as you stated get on the winding road and off course. Most of us find our way back to that good place. Nicely written. Great ending, "Now, I am back on course with roadmap in hand with a snappy little fellow over my shoulder who once in a while says, "That pathway is banned." Well done. Happy future writing. I really like your poem:-)


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



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    Joyce, I a big virtual hug! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this poem.

reply by joycetreasures on 21-Sep-2020
    You are welcome:-)
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This is a great poem and taught me a new words or two which doesn't happen often. The picture is nice and adds to the atmosphere of the setting that's congruent with the season. Good job.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thank you! I am glad it added to your war chest.
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I relished the parallel between your top note and the photo you took. Thank you for explaining your process in the lower notes along witht the details about cairns. Best wishes in the contest with your rhymed tercets- Joan


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



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    Joan, your welcome.Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this poem.
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This poem, Straight and Narrow Path, tells a poetic tale of living life on a winding course that has eventually been put back on that narrow track. Neat.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



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    Bill, Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this poem.
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What does the little chap have to say about your pipe, I wonder!

I enjoyed your ramble down what started as a straight and narrow path but veered off into a more relaxed life journey, even though you seem to have returned to the preacher's advice, as the end of the path draws near.

Steve


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Smiling back Steve! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this poem.
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Very good! Wonderful cadence and accompanying graphic. I also really like the rhyme scheme. Very good job presenting this. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



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    I do thank you so much!
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Becoming brazen is a waste of time that we all have to eventually figure out for ourselves; recognizing this lack of shame and apparent confidence, is truly the hallmark of being able to distinguish one's ability to self-deceive-self and to begin the real maturing process. I like how the poem speaks of the three progressions in one's life and that the emphasis is placed on the Barrow as the pivotal point. Nice moral. Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



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    Giovanni, grazie amico mio!

reply by giovannimariatommaso on 21-Sep-2020
    y/w giovanni

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In my opinion, a write with a distinct message and one I find personally relevant, a feeling which I am certain other readers share. I liked the almost random realization the writer experiences, as he emotionally returns to his early and acknowledged guidance...


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Eve, I smile back with gratitude for your time to read and comment on my poem, thank you very much!

reply by evesayshi on 21-Sep-2020
    You are very welcome indeed...Eve
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JLR--
Isn't it Robert Frost who describes the two paths through the dark woods -- the "road not taken." I'm pretty sure he takes it. A voice in my head telling me a path was banned would be a surefire way to get me to take it -- at least to see what is "banned" about it. Too much is banned by various "preachers" who know almost nothing about what they are banning, like Calvin banned dancing and music in Geneva. Didn't work did it? Luther tried to ban Jews -- that didn't work either though the Germans gave it a hell of a try!

Thanks for the poem
Wabigoon/Jeff


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Jeff, yep, I have strayed on many a path that, for me, were great lessons, some blushful awakenings and a few oops! But, fortunately I have traversed the more conventional paths than otherwise.
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