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Through Trial to Triumph

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Elizabeth Emerald
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Another fine piece. Heartbreaking re Monique being patronized--good for her for speaking up and giving Brad the boot--you continue to flesh her character out masterfully! Cheers. LIZ


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
    Thank you kindly.
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bhogg
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homas brins his youn (missed some 'g's'
worked for them both. (drop them...not needed)
So you don't think there's a future there?" Jefferson queried. (, after so)

Enjoyed your post. You drive your reader through quickly with your use of dialog. Unfair to just drop in on a chapter since I don't have a feel for the flow of story.


 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thank you for taking the time to review and thanks for the tips.
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Well, that was a tough decision to make, I hope there is no regret for either. Good stories as each develops separately as well as merging at times.


 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020



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    Thank you kindly.
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