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Heart and sea part 1


A sailor must choose between the sea and his love

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dmt1967
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"Fine," she (had) snapped, raising her hands as if to defend herself from his blows. (delete)

Great story. Thank you for sharing and stay safe. It showed great emotion.


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    Thanks so much as always for the great feedback and review!
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Hi Oliver, I do like stories when they take us to parts of the world beyond most of our budgets or just too far to go for most of us, or is that the lack of adventure in most people, a great first part to this story. Cheers Colin


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    Hi Colin. Thanks, I?m glad you enjoyed it. One reason I like writing is exactly what you just said, it takes me places I can?t afford to go Haha. Part 2 is a bit different but feel free to have a look. Cheers

reply by Colin John on 23-Sep-2020
    What China?, lol

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    Haha maybe more like the Pacific ocean
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Oliver,

So,I read it out of order and I'm kinda glad I did. That way I was able to see the second in that objective light that encouraged me to encourage YOU. ha

This was really well written. I enjoyed the descriptions and actions and scenes. It all seemed very realistic and true to life. I think it's rather marvelous. Thank you!

I really hope to see lots and lots more prose from you in the future~


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the lovely review Robyn, I?m so glad you enjoyed it. At the moment I?m trying to write one story a day, but it?s hard work and I?m not sure how long I can keep it up haha. Anyway thanks again for the great feedback!
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This is a very good story. People raised on boats and in the sea do tend to be unable to happily live on land and make their life there.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
    Thanks as always for the very nice review, I?m really glad you enjoyed it

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 22-Sep-2020
    You're quite welcome.
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I like and enjoyed the read of this Part 1 of this fiction about personal choice making, the taletelling, good beginning and traditional ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much, I really appreciate your review
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I enjoy stories of the sea and the sailors who are drawn to its siren call!
Jimmy sounds like a sailor who can't stand to not feel the ocean roll underneath his feet, and go where the wind and tide take him.
I'm curious how he met Eva, and why Jimmy would even consider settling down with a wife and child when he is a man consumed by wanderlust!
Looking forward to part 2, and learning more about the back story of Jimmy, Eva, and Pablo!


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
    Thanks for the great feedback, I really appreciate it and I hope you enjoy part 2. I think it?s also important to note they didn?t get married, he?s more in love with the sea than anything else! Thanks again
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