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Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Hettie, a Reputation - 1900"

A novel set in late Victorian Shropshire.

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RShipp
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'Permanent membership of the team elevated Tom's status amongst the town's young men to that of hero' (Interesting that even way back, being a prised athlete was a sign of adulthood to so many.) '... it had managed to endow him with sufficient arrogant self-confidence to be able to cope with his own ignorance.' (Typical dumb jock.)

You did a good job with your character portrayal of Hettie.


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
    All muscle and madness one might say. What has changed since then has been the rise of the female in competitive sport. Thank goodness that wasn't around in the period of which I am writing. Thanks for another fine review.
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The Hettie I knew before perhaps was quiet. This Hettie is a woman with a bad reputation. I find myself thinking that she never had any lovers earlier. So sad to hear that I was mistaken.


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Sweet little girls as well as sweet little boys can grow up into something rather different as a result of what happens to them along the way. Many thanks for this review.
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Damn it! If the dogs and horses can cope, I should be able to.- loved that line, certainly worthy of a chuckle. Enjoyed Tom's nerves even though he was still acting, all knowing. Hettie will show him,
cheers,
valda


 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for this sux star review. It was much appreciated.
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Hi Jim, Oh this is a great chapter and I had to laugh out loud several times. I think you have described Tom Joliffe to a T. Young man and bragging as they tend to do at that age yet full of arrogance, as well. And now he is to meet the worldly Hettie, only that meeting he has kept well secret. I love it. Very well written. Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for this six star review. I am pleased you saw the the humour in it. more of the same next time with a red triangle attached!

reply by Ulla on 27-Sep-2020
    Hehe, looking forward to that.

reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Just about to post it.

reply by Ulla on 27-Sep-2020
    Looking forward to that.
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A complete joy to return to your impeccable pen after something of a sabbatical from Fanstory. As always, I have come extremely late to this but the clarity of the write is such that I was easily drawn into Tom Joliffe's world. Respectfully - DJ


 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    So good to see you back reviewing, and thanks for this one with its six stars attached. Yes, you are late on the scen but there is still plenty of drama to come.
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-A good image and
story to go with it.
-You give very good detail
about Tom W. and what he
has been up to since Rugby School.
-It sounds like he has become a
master sportsman, which is
probably what he pretty much
"studied" in school!
-We see his vulnerable side because
he does not know what to expect
on his visit to see Hettie.
-He tries so hard to be a man,
but there is a lot of maturing to go.
-He has various jobs on the farm
to keep him busy, and then the day
finally gets there.
-I like how you compare his knowledge
of mating the horses with his lack
of knowledge where women are concerned.
-The ending was just right as he showed
up to see Hettie, and she showed him
"down the slope where the ash lay."
-Good job.


 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for this detailed review that acknowledges the important features I was trying to get over in this post.

reply by Pam (respa) on 27-Sep-2020
    You are very welcome and I appreciate your reply.
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This meeting is going to be interesting and I can't wait to read it. I'm sorry I'm going to have to wait. You are doing a good job with this story. Hettie is a slut that's for sure.


 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    A clever slut though, all the same, as you will indeed see, next time. Many thanks for this review.

reply by barbara.wilkey on 26-Sep-2020
    She'll probably get herself pregnant on purpose and claim Tom is the father so she can get the money.

reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    Wait and see. Lol.
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Oh, my .... You're gonna leave us hanging!
Looks like Our Tom is going to be a politician when he grows up. I hope Hettie is as discreet as the story indicates. Or not :)
I bet she's pregnant already, and is going to now blame it on Tom. Oh boy. Joshua's gonna freak!
But Hettie's tight with Jonet. Hettie's a politician too. She's amassing leverage with key people. One visit at a time.
Tom W and Heather will have to eliminate all slack, and hold the reigns steady from here on out. And they will come up on top of things.
Great read!
Lucy


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    Your prognoses are interesting. When I started writing this I had no idea where it was going. Now I have finished the first draft of what turned into a trilogy going all the way to 1950 I am amazed how character led the experience has been. I have material for posting here for the next two years.

    Many thanks for this great review.

reply by Lucy de Welles on 26-Sep-2020
    I was thinking as I was reading this entry, that it would be a really great story to continue for a long period of time. Multigenerational. We must be on the same wavelength :).
    Glad to hear it. Kind of a Poldark-y thing. Good for several seasons!
    You didn't give me anything to argue about this week :). Sigh...
    The characters are very strong, and the storyline can go alot of different directions. Unlimited combinations and possibilities.
    The two housemaids are interesting also.
    Have a great night!
    Lucy
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I see you've done your homework here. Rugby was a big deal back in those days. Question: did you mean "Master Tom?" I don't know what Maister means.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 25-Sep-2020
    I have used several dialect words in this feyther and maister for father and master. Thanks for looking in on this and reviewing.
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Of course you make us wait to see the outcome...I bet you even sneak in the auction, too, before we get to see this young man gaining 'some extra education'. You are such a tease, Gynt! :)
(Also, I'm a bit anxious for him. You wouldn't make a fool out of him, would you?)

I was relieved to read that Tom J finally found something to excel in!
He is so lost between to worlds. Also, there's a slight 'yellow' flag regarding alcohol consumption.

I appreciated the careful portrayal of a young man's anxiety, which is a whole different game that a young girl's. (Also, I didn't know about the stallions needing help).

Thank you or another fascinating chapter! I'm very curious where this is going!


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 25-Sep-2020
    Thank you for this magnificent, six star revie. The chapter breaks are purely there for FS. Many reviewers complain if the posts are over long. These chapters are word total based in the first instance and are in many cases far shorter than actual published chapters would be. Consequently there are more cliff-hangers.
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