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Art School


This story is a cherished memory.

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Mary Vigasin
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I like this short story.
You made your characters real to your reader and the situation very believable.
The ending wraps up the story very well tying the past and present.
Good Luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020


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A very well-written flash fiction about the moment two brothers ruined their father's new paint for his art studio. They were punished at that moment but later they find a snapshot of them smiling next to the dried tubes and discarded paintbrushes.


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2020


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This flash fiction speaks a story of your making an art school and discovering a photo of 1960 in the snapshot you two brothers as little kids; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2020


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A lovely little tale of entrepreneurs stifled at birth. It would have been great to have recorded how your pupils went on to become great, prizewinning artists but this was not to be.

Some points about contests on FanStory. 1. The normal format is to leave a blank line between paragraphs. Unformatted work such as this is liasble to be disqualified by the judges. 2. This reads like non fiction and this is a fiction contest. First person stories do tend to read as if they were memoirs or autobiography.

I feel that on both these counts this is likely to be disqualified.


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2020


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This vignette was fun to read and showed how two brothers became entrepreneurs. I can easily visualize the "class" of painters in Dad's studio in the basement. I especially like your ending. Rod


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2020


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Rosemary,

How sweet. We can never truly do anything to harm our statues in the hearts of our parents. Though we worry about that - thinking we might lose that position at any moment. *smile*

A lovely ending, this had! Thanks and good luck!


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2020


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