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Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Request for help, Part 2"

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I wonder what's going to happen. That last line has me on edge. And I wonder what Serria's doing right now, hmm...

I think Skerry and Keur's aunt are going to be just fine. I did notice a couple of spaces that needs editing...

??Though Lieu will probably want to use half (of) this for storage and the other half for making tea. No need to paint this.??


...paid for it, then arranged for (it to be delivered when the house was
ready.


Once that was done, Neu brought out the lease for the ladies to sign, which (they) did.



I'm looking forward to read the next chapter.


 Comment Written 03-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your review, great rating, and catches.

    Karlene

reply by AJ McCall on 05-Oct-2020
    You're welcome!
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Moving into a new apartment, opening a new account, playing with exchange rates this is so "normal", but there is a war up in the air. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your review and great rating.

    Karlene
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Nice story and I didn't see any errors, but I did see a spacing issue.

Skerry and Lieu went back to the station at night and returned to the house along with the men to clean and paint it. (hit enter again)
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You did a great job. I'm eager to read more. Shirley


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your review and great rating.

    Karlene
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Great opening for your chapter, it got rather intense in there. Were they joking or serious about the whirlpool tub? That would cost an arm and a leg in real life.


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your review and great rating.

    Karlene
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Mel Silverscales makes a deman that they let Bright Star, Rainbow Dreams, Silver Moon and others go free. They land on Alosia a couple of days later. Skerry and Lieu seek out a second hand store. Lieu and Skerry have obtained a house, and going about fixing it to dwell in. Vik gets a from Lady Natalia for help, off to Kollic Vik Goes, well done, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020



reply by the author on 25-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your review and great rating.

    Karlene

reply by royowen on 25-Sep-2020
    Well done
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