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A Better Way (Harriet Tubman)


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Thank you for this beautiful poem about such a great heroine of faith! She was so amazing and brave. And the biographies I read didn't focus on her faith so thank you for adding that. Congrats again on the Poem of the Month!


 Comment Written 15-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
    Thank you so much for revisiting this...my very best to you..have a lovely weekend.
    RGstar
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It is beautifully done, RG. The written as well as the spoken poem are moving, melodic, vivid in imagery and rich with meaning. I loved both versions. The illustration, too, is so full and meaningful. I also enjoyed your author notes. In the seventh line, there is a comma between found and within, which I think should be a space instead. I saw nothing else to correct or suggest. Thanks for posting this. ~MM


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much Miss merri....I appreciate your stars at this time. My best to you. I shall check that comma...I hadn't noticed. My best to you.
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Good morning to you, Dear Roy

Been a while, my friend. I hope all's well with you. We both seem to disappear and return about the same time :)

Well, well, well...

I can clearly see why this fabulous piece won the poem of the month award.

You have captured this account of our dark human history and have shone a bright light upon this truly magnificent and courageous woman. Most timely I must say, and let us never forget those who put their lives on the line to save the souls of others.

No point in telling you that a line here or there was finely written as I would simply copy paste the whole poem.

Thank you for your time to research dn enlighten me with this glorious piece.

kind regards

tracey xxxx


 Comment Written 10-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
    Oh...it didn't win :) but glad to be nominated. Thank you dear friend for reading. Wishing you a fabulous day.
    RG
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Hello my dear friend. I hope all is well.

I am elated that I stopped by FanStory today because I have the opportunity to read this gem, written about a woman of slavery who marks history.
Your ode of elegance and grace does Harriet Tubman justice. It speaks of her faith and dedication in pursuing freedom, for herself and other slaves " a better way" as appropriately titled and repeated.

The last stanza us my favorite, especially the imagery in the first line of that poem.

This poem deserves the nomination for POM, and it has made vote.

Good luck in the contest and stay safe.


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    Hello my deearest friend..good to see and hear from you, if appropriate to say.
    It has been a while again. Hope family is fine.
    Thank you so much , as always. Good to know I am always in good hands, because the best is always what you give, in all ways.
    Thank you.
    Wishing you a god day.
    I am taking a day at a time.
    Hope to read from you soon.
    My best wishes.
    RG
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Simply, beautiful.

Your care, and the dedication to the preparation and birth of this fitting tribute to Harriet Tubman, has rendered nothing less than a masterpiece.

Your well thought out written verse is brilliant enough, but your skilful oral recital truly acts to raise this work to a higher plane. The musical accompaniment is a touch of genius.

Well done my friend. Very well done

Best
John


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    And what a beautiful review. Thank you so much. Always good to hear from you. I have been away a while, with life. I take a day at a time. Good to see you still here.
    Thank you for the six stars.
    My best wishes.
    RGstar
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I disagree. I think you should've entered this in the Faith contest, because it would be a very strong contender. I enjoyed the "history lesson" - I've not heard of Ms Tubman until now, but I consider myself thus educated!

I think you put her story out there with much skill and masterful phrasing, your rhyme was a difficult one to stick to, but you managed that with great aplomb as well.

The only line I had a problem with was the first of your last stanza:

Breathless, starless night, shine yet bright where they her lay

I wondered whether "where she, they lay" might read better? Just a thought!

Overall, this was an engaging poem to read, and very educational as well. Thanks for sharing her story with us!


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Yes, good suggestion...its one of those where either can work detracting from nrm of essay English, but you robably would use 'her' as a preference if you think of '''where they lay her''..so could nt use ''where they lay she'' ...but its often a confusion between lie and lay, because somene has to put something in place to use the verb 'lay' though often many say lay, without thinking, it is written 'lie'
    b...but I see yur directionas ne could use 'she' as in 'where she is laid'

    Thank you for your suggestion and feedback...
    My best wishes,
    RGstar
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Amazingly written throughout its structural rhymed flowing stanzaic content. The beautiful narrative storyline of the heroine nurse Harriet Tubman is elegantly fitted to its brave historical event and easily understood through its selective use of vocabulary and code name Moses. An interesting real story which could be in contra position to the Tanzanian slave trader Tuppi Tip. Interesting historical notes and reading of the poem. Excellent work indeed!


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much...I appreciate your feedback, and thank you for the six stars.Sending you wishes.
    RGstar

reply by Alchera on 02-Oct-2020
    May your day be brighter than yesterday's and always welcome! Alchera
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I've been reading and listening to the stories of great revivalists through history, I'm half welsh and their have been many among , Donald Trump's mother was part of one on Lewis in 1949. Christians are very rarely ever lauded for selflessness in their lives, but the great abolitionists were Christian, Writer of amazing grace, Robert Newton, was a slave trader, until God got hold of him. This is a beautifully written poem RG. blessings Roy


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Yes...thank you Roy for the insight.
    My very best to you. Good to see you keeping faith.
    My best wishes.
    RG

reply by royowen on 01-Oct-2020
    Bless you
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This is right to the point of answering there is a better way. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Excellent work! I like how you structured this poem. Thanks for sharing!


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you Raul.
    My very best to you.
    Wishing you a pleasant week.
    RGstar
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Harriet Tubman was an incredible human being. I wish I were as brave and full of conviction as she was. She is a hero and there should be statues erected to honor her. Thank you for this write!


 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you for taking the time here.
    My very best wishes.
    Have a pleasant day.
    RGstar
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