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Rain Reminds Me


Trials test me.

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Y. M. Roger
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What a wonderful offering, my lady, that takes the rain and metal metaphors and truly weaves a song for the ages! ;) :) I really enjoyed your use of 'ing' words in some of your rhymes as those always seem to have a tune of their own! ;) Thanx for sharing, Tina!! ;) Yvette


 Comment Written 05-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the review! I like thinking of 'ing' as musical! I appreciate the stars!
    Tina
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Mary Vigasin
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Tina,
Well written poem reminding your reader that our trials and problems are
what life has to offer and God is near.
This is inspirational and uplifting to those who are struggling particularly during these troubling times.
Good work.


 Comment Written 05-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    Thank you, Mary. Your review tells me the message is getting through. I appreciate your comments!
    Tina
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A poem as soothing as the raindrops on a warm day.One can smell the fragrance of the mother earth in this poem.We shoulda all be grateful for the God's ever kindness. Lovely poem.Thanksfor sharing!


 Comment Written 05-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    Thank you for this review and stating it is comforting, which was my intention.Yes, we all should be grateful! Gods so good:)
    Tina
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I enjoyed the lilting rhythm of your poem very much... in fact I started singing it while I was reading it, as it flowed like song lyrics. It is a wonderful poem of faith, acceptance of coming out the other side of life's dramas with wisdom, and trust.


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Lisa,
    Thank you for this nice review:)
    Tina
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In my opinion, another "Exceptional" write - just gorgeous - since this is my second read and review, I guess I'll be missing stars earlier than usual today - so smooth in rhyming rhythm - I love it when the rhyme is pure as this is.
I only have one suggestion regarding one spot in the rhythm - with your permission - that of deleting one word in the entire poem - the word 'as' in the last line of the first stanza. As I said, a truly "Exceptional" write - the spiritual beauty of the rhyming descriptions are breathtaking...


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Oh Eve, thank you so much! You overwhelm me with encouragement! Your words are ines I will keep trying to live up to. I will look at that stanza now.Thanks again!
    Tina

reply by evesayshi on 04-Oct-2020
    You are so welcome, Tina, and dear lady, you have absolutely NOTHING to live up to, perhaps maybe pushing yourself into writing more poems...Eve

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    I'm trying to edit more and imagine more. The learning is so fulfilling, isnt it! Have a great week!
    Tina

reply by evesayshi on 04-Oct-2020
    Yes it is, and you're doing whatever you're doing beautifully - have a great week too...Eve

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    Same to you!
    Tina

reply by evesayshi on 05-Oct-2020
    Thank you, Tina...Eve
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Markie Doczi
 
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I think this is a lovely poem! The rhythm is bouncy and consistent, and I like that you gave your poem a beginning, middle and end. I think the fifth stanza is my favorite.


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you Markie! I appreciate hearing what you liked about it. This means so much, truly:)
    Tina
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That was absolutely gorgeous. It had the most amazing imagery, visuals, metaphors and about every poetic device that makes poetry beautiful.

Loved your abab rhyming, flow, meter and cadence; amazing imagery and visuals.

As preludes to winds are now whirling,
my heart starts a woeful tune,
for soon deadened leaves will be twirling,
beneath the blue of the moon.

How beautiful. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    You are so encouraging with your comments. It makes me happy that you enjoyed it. Thank you!
    Tina
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amada
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I like this line the best, there is musicality on it: "Ss raindrops from heaven are falling,tap-tapping a dance on my roof..." This is a strong poem about a fierce faith. Your lines are compelling.


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Fierce Faith...I love the phrase. May I use that later in a poem?
    Thank you for reviewing my poem. I appreciate your comments!
    Tina
    Tina
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I really enjoyed reading this poem and give a special shout out to the fifth stanza. Wisdom-embedded is a great phrase - very original. This has a positive and upbeat message of faith. Hugs, Lou


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Lou,
    Thank you so much for this review. It means so much that you enjoyed it. I did mean it to be encouraging.
    Hugs back!
    Tina
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Raffaelina Lowcock
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This is a beautiful rendering of God's purposes and how we are targets sometimes for a purpose. The refining process is an excellent example and rain for growth is spectacular. I loved this poem.

Ralf


 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020



reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you, Ralf! (I love your name, btw!)
    Your review warms my heart. You are correct that refining is a process. I'm glad you related to it.
    Hugs! Have a great day!
    Tina

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you, Ralf! (I love your name, btw!)
    Your review warms my heart. You are correct that refining is a process. I'm glad you related to it.
    Hugs! Have a great day!
    Tina
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