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Susan Larson

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In high school I worked in a nursing home where most of the residents were in demented mental states. Except for Dr. O'Connr who everyday donned his brown tweed sports coat with his Holy Cross football pin on the lapel, we knew nothing about these people. One day two of us looked in their files. We had a WWI Army nurse, a college professor, a professional ballet dancer, to name a few. How sad for them, especially for veterans who fought for our country to have their past jammed in a filing cabinet.

Comment Written 24-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020

Susan,
Thanks for your compassionate review. It is said when dementia hits anyone. It is nondiscriminatory.
Joan

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I like your theme here, we can see the ghost of what we once were. The pale cardinal behind the red cardinal is a perfect picture that fits your poem. Your three line poem says much and has a unique theme.

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020

Thanks for the concise, yet thorough review.
Joan

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This is a very nice short poem you have penned for the Picture This club entry. You used very good descriptive words that go well with the lovely picture. Thanks for sharing. Teri

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020

Thanks for the encouragement, Teri
Joan

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Mary Vigasin

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This is the type a words that gives your reader a loss of breath for the moment whether it is age, illness or a personal failure.
Well done in so few words
Mary

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020

Thanks for the nice review and for the generous rating, Mary.
Joan

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This is an excellent and unusual interpretation of the painting that prompts further consideration. I find it very intriguing...and I especially like the presentation as a Japanese-influenced short form. Whether the idea concerns aging, something like fading skills, or wistfulness over something no longer existing at all, it is clearly obvious you have met the club challenge with undiluted talent. Smiles, Janet

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020

Thanks, Janet, for the kind words. I am glad you like it.
Joan

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Jannypan (Jan)

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You did a great job with your challenge poem, DP. You few words speak volumes as to what readers take away from them. You give readers much to ponder--in a great way. There are so many ways to interpret this. I can see one thinking back over his/her life--events etc. that shaped who they are now compared to what they were earlier.
Respectfully, Jan

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020

Thanks for your thorough review, Jan. I like when poem can have many meanings.
Joan

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Dragon poet,
There is something so ethereal about this piece.
Yes, I see the fiery red bird so settled in its demenor....
is the other the Ghostly version of the past.....or the stoic protector.... unobtrusive in its perch...but on guard.
Either way- I liked this a great deal.
Well done.
Sammielwf

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020

Thanks for the encouraging remarks and high rating
dp

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Dorothy Farrell

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Hello Joan, a clever three lines. I know very little about Cardinals - we don't get them here in the UK. But your words I am sure tell us they don't get their glorious colours until they are mature. Gorgeous picture. Good club entry and a good read. Regards Dorothy x

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020

Thanks for reading and reviewing. The poem was written for the picture.
Joan

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Mark D. R.

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Honestly, the artwork first attracted me to read your poem. I read it and then found out it was a club entry. Then all fell into place.

Your 'ghostly image' reflects the artwork - good phase for your verse.

Mark

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020

Thanks for taking the time to read and review, Mark.
Joan

reply by Mark D. R. on 23-Oct-2020

Joan,

Consider 1) uncapping your first word since you used no period at the end, and 2) centering your text lines. IMHO both will increase your presentation level to other FS reviewers.

Mark

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This seems like a deeply personal write and as we age we often become different people as our experiences shape us and change us, a poignant write, love Dolly x

Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020

Thanks for your insightful comments and for all the stars, Dolly.
Joan

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