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Before The Touch


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Boogienights
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A very lovely and descriptive poem with such a hopeful message. We need to appreciate where we are and who we're with today, you never know what the future holds. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    That's right! Youth brings a different set of romantic notions... As we age we begin to truly appreciate that without the silence being comfortable, the acceptance being unconditional, the conversation being stimulating--the heart would not be nearly as full. Much to be said for a couple enjoying every moment "Before The Touch"--(though those moments too are still wonderful.)--Thank you for reviewing!--Karenina
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The closing couplet was magic. The music of the language, the vividness of the imagery...it all came to together there in the last two lines. I love this image of the two rocking chairs on the porch, two souls lit by an unseen torch. The flames of passion. And you made those flames come alive by using the image of the autumn leaves. estory


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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    I so hoped others would see the closing lines as a vision of hope and comfort and acceptance! Thanks for affirming that came through to you. I'm thrilled with your generous comments.--Gratefully, Karenina
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-Very nice image and
presentation, Karenina.
-It is good to see you.
-You have written a very
good poem with effective
imagery and rhyme.
-It is very introspective as you
contemplate time as it
relates to a relationship.
-The progression of ideas is
very good from "blindness"
and "silence" to the message
of enjoying what time we have.
-I also like the third stanza, and
the closing couplet is very good.
-Very well done!


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    Thanks so much for your input and review. It pleases me that my intent came through for you and others! Not a whole lot to crow about as I get older, but this comfortable space of quiet acceptance and unconditional love is truly a treasure! Gratefully, Karenina

reply by Pam (respa) on 12-Oct-2020
    You are very welcome, Karenina. I agree about not a lot "to crow about," but every once in a while something comes a long. Take care and be well.

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    You too! If you've been given a long weekend thanks to Columbus Day Ihope your enjoying a bit of extra fun time!--Karenina

reply by Pam (respa) on 12-Oct-2020
    Actually, Karenina, we are both retired, so we sometimes loose track of time and days. Maybe one of those signs of aging:) Hope you have a good long weekend, though:)

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    I hear that! With COVID it also seems all the days stream together...Karenina

reply by Pam (respa) on 12-Oct-2020
    It does seem that way sometimes.
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The author's words are beautiful, deep, descriptive and creative. The words of this poem were comforting, calming and brought back memories
for me. The poem flows and connects well. Have a great day!


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    What more can a poet ask but that the words he or she labored over comforted and calmed the reader-and brought back memories? I am so pleased you read and reviewed this effort! Thank-you, Karenina
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For a couple that has survived coupledom for many years, a lot of words are no longer necessary. You know the thoughts of the other person well enough to gamble on being occasionally wrong.


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    Yes... Better still, it's alright to be wrong sometimes. No need to guard your thoughts or hide your true emotion. The "many years" together OR the "many years" of life experience if the relationship is found in later years brings a certain peace that is immeasurable! Many thanks for your review, sir. --Karenina
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Hey Karenina.

I like strong phrases and sentences in poetry and prose and you have many in this sonnet. Here are some of the lines that are particularly striking to me:
'Tis nebulous, this serendipity..."
"for ev'ry moment shared fulfills a need!"

Poetry that tells a story is the only type I like which is why I don't understand contests here to "tell a story in a poem." What does poetry do if it doesn't tell a story? A favorite of mine as an example is "When I Was One and Twenty" by A E Housman. This is like that one to me. Your last stanza describes the setting as your first three stanzas describe the emotions.

In the next line, I prefer (Yet now) over (Rather) because of the feel of the iambic pentameter.
"Rather, let us enjoy the time we've got..."

This is a very strong piece. I like the use of the ellipsis.

Robert


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    Thanks for your input. I will go and reread, considering the change from "rather" to "yet now"-- I had thought of that, instead so we're on the same track there. You surely have a point with the iamabic pentameter. I absolutely agree with you about a poem telling a story... When I read some free verse of contemporary published poets and I haven't a clue what they were getting at I wonder, somehow how did he or she come to be so lauded?! Abstract expressionism worked well for Jackson Pollock. Not so much for this reader in the world of poetry! Thank you for your review.--Karenina

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 18-Oct-2020
    You're welcome
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Nicely written sand deep. Makes the reader think and make every day in life meaningful and enjoyable. I like how you wrote some of the words. Great writing.


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    Thank you Yohani. Yes! That is the underlying message! That--and the promise to those not yet in older years, that it is a wonderful settling in of comfort level and trust that enhances rather than detracts from the laws of attraction!--Karenina
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This is an interesting autumnal poem. I particularly liked the last two lines:

A cabin, autumn leaves, a rustic porch?
Two rocking chairs, two souls, an unlit torch...

To me this smacks of a perfect evening, just waiting to be inhabited by a couple of elderly lovers.













 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    And so it is! Perhaps not so much elderly as approaching that stage... Ah, but I believe the reader molds the theme to fit their experience and hopes. Certainly two who are far beyond the folly (and fun) of youth and who have learned the quiet spaces in their lives are filled with possibility and an acceptance that each moment is of import! Many thanks--Karenina
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Beautifully presentation of your interesting and wonderful poem. It would be lovely to have someone you love on a front porch of a cabin. Your rhyme and rhythm flowed perfectly for this piece. Thanks for sharing. ~Brenda


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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    Thank you for enjoying this! Yes, I agree--I would take a weekend in the New England autumn woods with a man who accept me just as I am over any romp at the most expensive hotel or resort... With age comes a glorious acceptance that we so often did not recognize in our younger years!--Thank you, Karenina
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It is nice, and so natural that when we grow old together, we know each other's thoughts. My parents were like that, and now I find my husband and I are, too. It's a comforting thought. Your poem says it in a delightful way. Well done, Karenina. :)) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 12-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2020
    Thank you Sandra. Be it husband or soulmate or dear treasured friend--when, in these often not so golden years it is miraculous to find someone who shares, who listens, who respects your honesty and your silence... Perhaps I would not have appreciated these qualities in the frenzy of youth, but now I find they are priceless!--Karenina
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